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A Little Hope




I watched the little woodlouse as he crawled around my sink
he didn’t seem to know which way to go,
the more I watched his antics, the more he made me think
his bold determination put on show.

He may have many legs beneath his hard protective shell
but what he really needed was a rope,
the sink was steep and slippery, his own pure form of hell,
the one thing that he mostly had was hope.

He surely had me mesmerised, I couldn’t look away,
I thought about the spider in the cave,
a little perseverance is bound to save the day,
with life and death he had the closest shave.

Outside the sun was shining and the sky the deepest blue
I gently coaxed this creature on my hand,
I opened up the window, well what else was I to do
and put him on the sill as I had planned.

I imagine that he thanked me as he went to find a home
his big adventure over for today,
maybe when he’s settled in he’ll never want to roam
and outside in the garden he will stay.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Topnotchsy
    October 25
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    Fun, light piece with a wonderful rhythm to it.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 26

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      Many thanks for stopping by and reading one of mine, I always appreciate your comments.

      Sue
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  • Camille Morin gold member
    October 24

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    This is delightful! I so enjoyed reading it.

    Sincerely,
    Camille Morin


  • Dalaney gold member
    October 24

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    Oh, how I love this charming delightful poem! You are a better person than I, Miss Sue...I would have screamed and then hit the poor creature with my shoe!



    L

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 26
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      Many thanks Lane ... poor little chap was already a prisoner without killing him as well ... I suppose I could have flushed him down the sink

      Love
      Sue


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    October 23

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    Rolly pollys I just loved them until!....
    I saw this black mass on the lawn, yup
    it was those little guys eating the dog or cat poop
    yuck ...but getting back to your write,
    I loved this poem well written and very thought
    out story line, and creative ss

    love and blessings

    Rend

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 23
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      Many thanks for the comment Rend, as to the piece about your lawn, look on the bright side, at least they were serving a purpose that not many critters would want to do

      Sue

  • highlandersheart
    October 23

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    Very thoughtful

    You make me wonder how we are like this little creature and need someone bigger sometimes to come and pick us up and put us back where we belong. Nice wording.

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 23
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      Thank you for reading and commenting ... I agree, I think there are times we all need a helping hand and there are times we need to give a helping hand to others

      Sue


  • sinfull
    October 22

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    This is such a delightful read. I love the image of somebody bent over the sink watching a bug...I would do that! But more so I like the thought of people actualy considering someines (ok even a bugs) feelings when caught within a predicament. so often we forget to wear another's shoes...er...perhaps because they require eight of them? smiles. A great read, this.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 23
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      Thanks so much for reading my poem and seeing the message clearly

      Sue


  • midnight51
    October 22

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    The rhymes are skillful - the part that stuck out to me most was the rope bit - I loved the thought of a tiny rope was all he needed to waddle his way out of the sink.

    Josh

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 23
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      Thanks for reading Josh, I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and maybe the rope was there all the time, but he failed to see it

      Sue
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  • mooniemc
    October 21
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    Love it innocent fun!
    Moon


  • MizzConstrued
    October 21

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    great rhyme. a story I can associate with, finding brittle critters new homes...


  • breannawilliams
    October 21

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    This is really good! You use great imagery and it flows really well, and it's really just all-together interesting.


  • LimeWater
    October 21

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    I love it :-). It's something I'd do. I can't stand to watch anything struggle. And it touched me, because these days, people just don't care enough. And we all need a little hope that others won't see us struggle on through life either.

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 23
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      Thank you for your kind words and I'm glad it effected you in such a way, that was how it appeared to me after I'd written it.

      Sue


  • just mercedes gold member
    October 21

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    I really like this - willingness to show compassion and feel empathy with all creatures isn't that common, and it's always heartening to see it in action.

    Your poem is gentle and flows like a smile! I like especially that you could read human endeavour in the wood-louse's actions, for all living things are part of each other in a way.

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 23
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      Thank you for your comment and for seeing a deeper meaning to it, I was originally going to call it 'Perseverance', but decided that maybe we all need a little hope in our lives

      Thanks again.

      Sue


  • Thomas Scott gold member
    October 21

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    Lovely. The rhythm, vocabulary are gentle and enhance the kindness of the story.
    Good stuff, Sue.


  • darlee77 gold member
    October 20

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    This is very good. So tender and caring with such great imagery. I really enjoyed it. God bless


  • myusikah
    October 20

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    Beautiful personification.Idon't know what to say about it, but it's an amazing write. I agree with the others. xDD

    --pia♫♪


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 23
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      Many thanks Pia for reading and leaving a comment, it's much appreciated ... Sue

  • Bob Fox
    October 20

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    Sue

    Hope and what a fine lesson you have penned for all of us who refuse to see the silver linning . Essencential in our quest for happiness. Another fine write poet.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Many thanks Bob ... we all need to seek the silver lining ... it's there somewhere

      Sue
      x

  • xnickelsx
    October 20

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    I love how this connects the elegance of poetry to the mess of everyday thought.


  • Storminbrenda silver member
    October 20

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    I bet it did say thank you to you saved its life bless you for such a kind heart and fantastic write brought a giggle and a smile to a grouchy wet day *hugs* thank you


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Many thanks for your comment, I'm glad I could brighten up a grey English autumn day for you.

      Sue


  • RikkiRae silver member
    October 20

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    Your poem brought a smile to my lips. There are times when all creatures need a little hope and a helping hand. As I read your poem I could so easily imagine seeing you are you lifted the woodlouse to safety.
    However here we call them slaters and they can virtually stip a garden of seedlings over night, thus I would show them no kindness or mercy.

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Thank you for your comment, here in England they do as their name suggests, mainly they eat wood, so we don't consider them too much of a pest.

      Sue

  • losteen
    October 20

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    i love this poem! It really shows the kindness of your nature. Beautiful write, wonderful read.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Many thanks for your comment and I'm glad you enjoyed the read.

      Sue


  • Gwenevere
    October 20

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    Love this Sue.We all need a little hope, just like your little Woodlouse.Your poem has a lovely gentle flow to it and gives a good feel factor to the reader.Well done and many thanks for sharing, Ros

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Thanks so much Ros, I'm glad you enjoyed the read ... this was just a couple of minutes out of my day, but it made me write this, it's funny where inspiration comes from.

      Sue

  • cstehr13
    October 20

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    Open hearted for the smallest of creatures. Shows true thought and care for all of life.GOOD POEM, GREAT HEART


  • brochoppie
    October 19

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    I liked this one! When I clicked on this, I thought it might be about something else. It was very cute and I like the hidden message that was in there that us humans need to follow with hope as well. Very good write and thanks for sharing!


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Many thanks for reading and leaving a comment, I'm glad you liked my poem.

      Sue


  • S.Hunt
    October 19

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    Fun read!

    I really enjoyed the read. Watching animals, insects, and people as well is fun and interesting. Determination and hope along with a helping hand can change the impossible. Great job.

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Many thanks for your comment ... I adore watching ... especially people, I make up little scenarios about their lives and that can be fun!

      Sue


  • arafura gold member
    October 19
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    I love it!


  • darl3n3
    October 19
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    lil woodlouse

    well done.
    the title fits it too.


  • manatee
    October 19
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    Your poem, lovely. You: cute as a bug. -Manatee


  • Eric Marsh
    October 19

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    oh my my quite the little life saver are we....lovely poem lucky little louse lol..hey louse rhymes with scouse...mmmmm...suppose you could make a nice louse stew haha..keep well babe...

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Hi Eric, yes louse and scouse do rhyme and I thought you were going to say "Would I rescue a scouse?" ... of course I would ... anything but a

      Sue
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  • laura0757 gold member
    October 19

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    HI there, I read this and I liked it....i did.........it painted a picture in my head. but I need to know lol.......what Is a woodlouse is it those things I have called roly poly......just how its spelled is what I refer to that, perhaps for a lack of knowledge. Is this brown? bugs interest me, and the saving of them...........good luck in the contest....ps. take back all the stuff about the bug, I saw the picture, and yes I am right, and out to lunch today.....lol


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Thanks for reading Laura and I'm glad you know what a woodlouse is ... they're kinda cute !

      Sue


  • hawkeslake gold member
    October 19

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    I've been reading an SF book by Karen Traviss in which ALL living creatures are considered people; and the aliens from outerspace are about to exact judgement for human's causing so many people to go extinct... I think you'd be exempt, for your kindness to this little crawly "person"! A lovely poem, excellent to read, great observations. Lita

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Many thanks for your comment Lita, I personally think that aliens would see mankind as an ant infestation on the planet and squash the lot of us
      I'm glad you enjoyed this poem.

      Sue


  • Pattiboo silver member
    October 19

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    What a kind caring person you are to be sure I bet you provide dining rooms for slugs and snails in your garden as well lol

    I opened up the window, well what else was I to do

    You could have turned the tap on a flushed him down the plug hole -- Sorted!

    Actually your pictures of 'him' makes him look quite attractive ours are just gray in colour .

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Many thanks for your comment Pat. I don't provide seating and tables for the slugs and snails, they don't need any encouragement in my garden ... but, don't mention eight legged creatures

      Sue


  • UncleDunk gold member
    October 18

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    And I thought I picked strange subjects to write about!

    Your tale told with a lovely tongue
    As sweet as one could wish it
    If my wife saw a woodlouse near
    I know she'd make me squish it!

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      It's not a woodlouse that does me in
      it's a spider with legs black and hairy
      to see one crawl I'll kick up a din
      'cos there's nothing that's quite so scary!

      Me pick a strange subject ... never

      Thanks for your comment in verse, I appreciate it.

      Sue
      x


  • deercatcher
    October 18

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    Very observant piece. We called these pill bugs or doodlebugs or roly polies. I was looking out the window today on a perfect morning; crisp cool mixed clouds... And a huge shadow crossed the yard; then another. I ran out back to see 5 buzzards circling the back yard a scant 100 feet up. One of them was trailing a gossamer streamer of shining cobwebs a foot long. They swirled together, adjusting to the north. The streamer gave me a way to single out one buzzard. It reached forward with its foot, and down with its beak, and clawed off the web, which sailed slowly to the ground, shining in the sun...

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Thank you for your lovely comment and glimpse into your life as well ... I would imagine that was a sight worth seeing.

      Sue
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  • DogFish silver member
    October 18

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    sweet !

    Your little tale of perserverance brings to mind the story of Robert the Bruce who ,in one of his darkest hours, is said to have watched a spider in hard straights such as "your" woodlouse; and from that little creature's example, he found renewed courage to go on to take Scoland back from the English and win the throne for himself!

    Maybe you become Queen of the Scots one day!
    ...or at least they'll make you Queen of the Woodlice!

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Many thanks for your comment ... this was a sort of personal poem for me, a bit 'Robert the Bruce' as I have issues I have to overcome in my life and this little woodlouse made me realize ... 'anything is possible'

      Sue
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  • The Dark Writer
    October 18

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    Excellent

    This is really good, it flows smoothly and each verse pulls you in to read the next. Excellent work, showing compassion and giving the common woodlouse personality too


  • AsIThink gold member
    October 18

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    haha...a very nice story with nice rhyming and a wonderful message. I've seen this one many, many times (no, not the bug...some bug in straightened circumstances...). This was a lovely piece of kindness even to a bug. Good job; even the same acts of kindness are so valuable.

    AsIThink...


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Thank you for your most welcome comment ... everything deserves the right to live even bugs!

      Sue
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  • fiona8 silver member
    October 18

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    bugaboo

    A poem of a bug. This is pretty cool, to have s omuch to write about a woodlouse. And, how kind of you to put it whee it belonged? Nice meter. Cheers.


  • awannabepoet
    October 18

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    Now this is what I call a true loving soul, a friend to all big and small and this lucky bugger found a savoir and a ride to freedom at least until such time as a hungry critter finds him.

    Excellent poem indeed.

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      What happened to him after I gave him his freedom is completely out of my hands
      Thanks for reading and the comment.

      Sue
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      • awannabepoet
        October 20
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        I know, I know you did your part and that is all he could ever ask of your kind heart.

        Excellent in all ways, charity and poetry.


  • Lulu Gee silver member
    October 18

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    Oh what a bug...
    Hi Sue, what a lovely tale and as Dan says I hope he has no hungry friends..ahhahaha!!!
    Love Lu xx


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Many thanks for your comment Lu, but don't worry, he's back outside with his friends.

      Love
      Sue


  • Amera gold member
    October 18

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    This is a delightful read. I really don't like bugs much but this poem made me feel sorry for one. I also never heard of a woodlouse so I went to look it up. ( I guess we don't have them here )

    Anyway I found this:
    Woodlice need moisture because they breathe through gills, called pseudotrachea, and so are usually found in damp, dark places, such as under rocks and logs. So I guess that's why he was in your sink.

    It takes a true poet to write a poem like this about a bug and I'm honored to be your friend.

    Love,
    Amera♥

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Hi friend, I'm so glad you enjoyed my little woodlouse (roly poly, pill bug or doodle bug) they are known by many names and he was rather cute!
      Just remember to aliens we (humans) probably seem like ants!!!!

      Love
      Sue

  • Purrsanthema
    October 18

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    What a cute little critter! So that's what a woodlouse looks like! Nice colors in his little armored outfit! VERY funny antennas. Look how large the skirted plates? scales? are down low on his sides. Nicely scalloped too. Certainly do a big job of protecting his tiny little feet, it seems.

    Great deed.

    Loved the poem.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Thank you for your comment ... yes, they are funny little creatures, kinda cute!

      Sue


  • Bluemonday silver member
    October 18

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    He'll thank you Sue, he will one day for what he eats is wood
    by eating wood is how he got his name,
    i hope your windows double glazed in plastic when he comes
    and brings his friends to eat your window frame...?
    Ha, a lovely poem and after all, how can we destroy such tiny creatures...Dan

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Hi Dan, thanks for your comment ... and I'm quite safe, I have Upvc window frames, but he scuttled off into the garden anyway to join his friends

      Sue
      x

  • Nice job. Saving a wood louse is not something most people do. I live in an old house and this time of year the mice come in from outside. I have to do my best to get rid of them. But, if one survives, he often gets a trip far enough away to keep him out of my house and give him a chance to survive.

    Mike

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      October 20
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      Many thanks Mike for your comment and also your tale of the mouse ... I'm glad you let the occasional one go

      Sue
      x


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 18

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    What a woodlousy poem

    Lovely stuff, little observations told in beautiful rhyme and flow

    Great stuff

    Jeff


  • csmmoms2
    October 18

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    Quite a story!
    Some bugs have rights too. -c

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