A city so bright with vibrant gold light,
Subdues the shadow presented before me,
And decadence at dusk, oh how I must,
Get a better view at what I want to see.
You're dressed to kill, and it feels so real,
I'm going to move and make you mine,
Take you for a walk in Acacia park,
Come on, Girl, I'll show you a good time.
I'll follow you till dawn, as the city's sounds yawn,
I just want to subdue you seductive siren,
You look so pretty and I'm feeling kinda needy,
Need a better view at what should've been done.
You're dressed to kill, and it feels so right,
I want to take you right here tonight,
Just for a stroll, to caress and hold,
Come on Girl, I'll show you a good time.
I'm the Prowler!
Author notes
Inspired by Iron Maiden's "The Prowler".
Hope you enjoy Maiden fans. Up the irons!
A contest entry
- IRON MAIDEN TRIBUTE, pw allowed by weathergirl123.
1000 points, ended November 5, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Oh good god, i got shivers down my spine the whole way through!! Wow, that is awesome, and a really well done rhyming scheme. Flowed really well through the entire piece.
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I can feel and see everything, him stalking her, feel the need. Made my heart race a little. I absolutely loved it, it's perfect, don't change anything. Thanks for entering my contest! -
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No problem, glad to see another Maiden fan amognst us.
I would've tried perhaps something like the Phantom of the Opera, but I figured Prowler might be my bag.
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Bruce Dickinson all the way, but Di'anno didn't do too shabby a job. By chance have you heard Prowler '88?
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Yes I have, actually. I still prefer the Di'Anno years though. I like Dickenson's voice, but I get tired of it after a while (like after 10+ songs in a row).
Hopefully Ill get to see maiden if they come around again.
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I haven't heard that song, I just tried to find it but my computer wasn't happy. It is not on any of my maiden CD's ( I have only 9 of their CD's ) so it must be on one I haven't got. Anyway your poem is well written and you obviously have the talent for writing. Still I would have liked to have heard the inspiration behind this poem/lyrics. Up the irons and good luck here!
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It's the first track off of their self-titled debut album I think. It had Di'Anno on vocals instead of dickenson. Thanks for the comment
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