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Take What You Came For

Suck it ‘til it’s dry.
Go on.
Swill my marrow around through your teeth
and sell it on for extortionate expense.

Why bother asking,
you’re going to take it anyway.
Rip it from my bones
but be sure to sew my lips together,
they’ve a tendency to talk
and we wouldn’t want that.
No.

Squeeze out the last drop,
go on,
you may as well take what you came for.
Make sure no one’s watching though,
you wouldn’t want that.
No.
Not at all.

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  • JeniePhiend
    October 20

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    Whoa.
    This is quite unlike a lot of what you've been doing recently- it's cutting in every sense!
    The sounds and the rhythm make it so harsh, with the sibilance and the use of negative [yeah, Eng Lit A-level etc etc].
    LIKE IT.