Damn Man!
I love the Way
You move
Across the stage.
I Love the
Crescendo’s
And the
Poetic word~play.
I love the
Way You look,
I even love
The
Way You’ve
Got Me
Hooked.
I
Especially love
The Way
Both Your
Brain & body
Shiver
And Convulse,
Unconsciously
Twitching
In All
The right places
At just
The right paces
Please tell me what you think
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Love the rhythms here... they go so perfectly with the grooves. A fun, brisk read. Love the title... what a wonderful lead in to the whole idea of being hooked... we know it is coming... we just dont know how yet... so we read on in anticipation...a nice effect!
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Oh woohhhh... LOL
Jan, you have such a way with your words.
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Why thank you. I do so try.....
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Stardust, I enjoyed this very much. But, you and I both know, or should know, by now, that the physical beauty of the male, (just as the female), is fleeting...and that the "true" beauty lies within...Still how it stirrs the soul....amongst "other" places...LOL Great Wrtie, very sensual!
A. L. O'Prunty
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That is hilarious. It's written about an older male performer. Doesn't detract from his beauty a bit in my eyes - actually adds to it. I find those who are older, and of sound mind/body to really be quite wise.
So glad we agree!
Thanks, as always, for commenting!
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Women like watching and looking too, and appreciating a man's "presence". "All the World's a stage!"
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Amen Sister Friend!
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Very Good
Very sensual. Needs no improvment for this readers enjoyment. We do give the guys a look over if he has a good face he must have a great butt.
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WHY REVISE IT? IT FLOWS PERFECTLY AND GETS ITS MESSAGE ACROSS VERY WELL, AS WELL.
A sweet and sensual piece that has the reader and writer both on fire with sweet and sensual desire - and has this fellow 'unconsciously twitching in all the right places' to use your words after reading it on a very stormy and rainy Sunday that I just may spend most of in me bed with my MacBook Pro by my side. Keep them coming, Jan.
Peace & Love!
Earl.
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Earl,
You're so sweet! I always choose that option because I want people to feel free to leave any comment they want - I'm not afraid of criticism, I can take it. I don't always follow the advice, but it's nice to hear it, and to learn.
Thanks hon!
ya All-Ways, ~ Jan ~
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You're young and you throw out the line...waiting for a big fish to come by and take a nibble. Hope the line is heavy enough to reel him in...hope that the bait is just right for Mr-big-fish. How do you measure a fish in the life. What scale do you use? What about the frying pan? -c
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Revising the comment because of a new perspective on the frying pan - took it "metaphorically" this time.
Yes, dear, I have been Burned in the frying pan (life) and Believe there's one (or two) thing(s) left (to do) in order to be Purified.
So........excited!
ya All-Ways, ~ Jan ~
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Deducted one star for the use of "frying" pan. Baking or grilling, frying rarely, if ever. Now sizzling somewhere besides the kitchen? That's allowed and encouraged.
ya All-Ways, ~ Jan ~
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yum this is sensual and beautiful i liked it heaps very nicely presented indeed
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