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your kiss never felt so good

There were no more thoughts

running through my head
as the crimson and steel collided

with a kiss.

 

I embraced it,
your sharpness never felt so right.

Not a struggle or fight,
like when you try to pull away.

This time you stayed tight against me,
caressing me....

like I always wished that you would.

 

I never dreamt it would
feel so good....

as my lips bleed out cries

knowing you

never were the one

to love me.

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prompt---"I'm back to kissing a razor, and pretending it was you, so maybe I won't feel the pain" Stephanie Wood

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  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 18

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    Ah..this is a broken piece ..broken in love and the tears are in the eyes..can be seen in the words of this touching poetry as well..well said poetry is here..


  • sweet arrival gold member
    October 17

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    mwah...
    'This time you stayed tight against me,
    caressing me....
    like I always wished that you would'

    yes, pulled tightly in and relinguishing everything in that caress. oh oh oh... your romantic writing does something to me. you have a way of being so charming and you dont push any message down my throat... it just seeps in naturally, and i love that.

    as for the ending...
    loved the twist. it really completes it, even though i was all for a happy ending there


  • luna-midnight gold member
    October 17

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    aw, this is deep and sad..like how i feel...except not excited or joyed over it hahaha
    this great thanks for entering, and all. good luck
    Stephanie ♥


    • Whyitt U
      October 17

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      thanks...I changed it a bit...hope thats better.

      hope you feel better to


      • luna-midnight gold member
        October 17
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        omg i totally love the ending now! its so great..and emotionl..and tragic. like me. haha

        and thanks, so do i!

        how are you?


        • Whyitt U
          October 17
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          I've been alright...haven't been on here much this summer and I've missed it.....

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