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Moonstruck

           

                             
                                    Moonstruck       


Overhead, la Luna the fairest handmaiden in god’s heavens sends magic moonbeams abroad, turning earth’s oceans to silver.
                                           
Around her, bright stars like clusters of diamonds lie scattered on the black velvet of the night sky complementing her beauty, while a passing comet salutes her on its journey to distant worlds
She hangs in the night sky full and voluptuous like a pregnant woman, beauty radiates from her and she is fair to look upon.

Far below a gentle breeze heavy laden with scent whispers secrets, and palm trees ripe with dates sway gently to the silent heartbeat of the universe.

Nearby a couple lie entwined in each other’s arms, eyes reflecting their innermost dreams and desires while lips full and sensuous touch and tease, all around them sand dunes whisper, and golden grains  dance in celebration of their love.

And in the heavens above, the instigator looks down is well pleased.



           

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  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    November 4
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    Congratulations on the Bronze Cup!!

  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    October 26

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    Beautifully Inspirational!!

    And very poetic!! Your awesome muse is riding high upon a moonbeam, Bill!! I'm wishing you all the best in the contest!!
    Peace & Hugs,
    xx Cyn xx

  • Humm..truely a beautiful poetry with the curious tone bejhind the immagery you brought here with all your skill and the depth as well..well done..and thanks for sharing it...