Every piece of me
Shattered
A mirror on the floor
Reflecting things I cannot see
Will not see
Patch me up your very best
Needles
Thread
Stitches
Turn me to your rag doll
Depicting your perfection
Imperfect
Pieces of you sown into the fabric
That is Me
Showing you yourself when you
Stare down your mirror
It Falls
A mirror on the floor
Every Peice of You
Shattered
Author notes
as. phy. xi. ate.
My Bad I forgetted =P
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I think we have or will be in this situation at least one time in our life.
"Patch me up your very best
Needles
Thread
Stitches
Turn me to your rag doll
Depicting your perfection
Imperfect"
My fav. Masterfully expressed and eloquently witten.
My your inkwell remain endless. Its amazing reading other's works,
sometimes when you think about it, your problems at the moment
can be pale in comparison.
~John~
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This holds a lot of emotion. The only thing I need is your AP name in the author notes please. I have felt this way before and it sucks.
I am sending you to round one, would like to see what you can come up with. :]
Congrats.
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named it lol thank you =)
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Stellar write.
I adore the format.
And the wording? Beautifully fitting.
The perspective is a common one, but the way you displayed it is unique.
It's difficult for me to choose a favorite part because I love it all.
Amazing job on this. ♥
You have talent when it comes to poetry.
~Kaity. ♥
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Amazing! I get out of this that no one is perfect and when they try to fix or make better of someone else, that is only when they realize that they need fixing too.
very deep thoughts here. good job! -
bookmarked :D
this is amazing. it's totally fresh and unique. not like anything i've ever read before.
the last stanza is perfect and i love the title.
at first i thought it was an acrostic until i realized that it was spelling EAR...lol just thought i'd share my blond moment
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lmao! Acrostic would have been a good idea but no no. =P no ear lol.
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You are a brilliant poet,
if this poem is anything to judge your volumes by
This is absoposolutely heartrending,
'and your language is just . . . beautiful.
I can feel the drops of pain coming from your words.
Wow.
I look forward to reading more of your stuff.
My best,
Zach Estel
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