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Empty Mansions

On an ocher Autumn day
An old man made his way
Down a lane of empty mansions
As they caught his wandering gaze

His thoughts became a boggle
So he stopped to briefly oggle
The dwellings wealth attained
yet nothing shall remain

All glories ebb and wane
to  live with those who care
And feel the love they share
The prize we seek so fair

As the grass withereth
And the flowers fadeth
Like the falling Autumn Sun
Only love stays the same










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  • Sandygram silver member
    October 20

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    Lovely Poem My Friend

    Wesley, A beautiful poem that flows like a soft autumn breeze among the dancing leaves. You have penned such lovely imagery within your words. This was delightful to read this Fall morning. A lovely message too. You take care. Hugs and Smiles, Sandy


  • catz Moderators member
    October 17

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    This is beautiful, Wesley. You've captured very poeticly, some of the important things in life
    A very admirable poem by one of my most admired poets


    Dee


    • Wesley Storer
      October 19
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      Thank you Catz

      I am proud to be one of your most admired poets, as you are one of mine! I changed the title from Bright spots along the way to "Empty Mansions", however, I kept your great comment. Thank you.