A cold wintry night
When the wind howls songs
To the darkness of the forest
That is tonight
And it is tonight
That blue-gold flame goes out
Where I have once warmed
My numb hands
And the dull red wax
Melted and left behind
Still warm from the heat
Sits itself sleepily down
My trembling fingers
Dip into it's warmth
And I relax them
There is no need for worry
Now the wind only whispers
Hushed dreams into my mind
And the darkness of the forest
Rustles with creatures falling asleep
The dawn light awakes me
Providing warmth, replacing the candle
For the red wax has dried
And it is peeling off slowly
I let it peel off at it's own pace
Like a child dozing softly
Savoring the time before the blanket
Has completely gone
And these hot summer days haven't ended
Neither have those cold summer nights
So I'll just wait until the brisk nighttime comes in
And that blue-gold flames goes out
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That's really pretty. I don't know what it means, but the imagery is so relaxing, and it makes me feel calm.
You're really good at setting scenarios.
And I don't know how to describe how this poem makes me feel.
"And the dull red wax
Melted and left behind
Still warm from the heat
Sits itself sleepily down"
I love this stanza, I really do.
"And that blue-gold flames goes out" I love this line...but 'that' should be "those"
a few grammar errors here and there, but I wish I wrote such amazing poems like you.
I like how you use a time structure in your sentence...and how things pass from night to day. I can never put an aspect of time into my writing.
Amazing write, once again.
I think I'm favoriting you...
-->pia♫♪
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Lovely imagery...the wintery night, and just sitting by candlelight until somber sleep hits. Warmth for your hands. Excellent. Blessings.
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