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Spinderella in Light

spinderella in black rises up through smoke,
twists her curves toward multi-colored strobes
that splash with crests of oceanic neon.

her form is motion,

light bathed goddess

 

churning a spell-bound crowd.

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  • Max Alexandersson
    November 3

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    Brilliant and the font the fucking awesome.
    Would use it all the time if I had a gold-membership.


  • mgmc gold member
    October 22
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    Love it! Great imagery. Quite a picture you paint!


  • hisaddiction
    October 19
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    you're the best.


  • Daizee silver member
    October 19
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    ah...digging the mood


  • Emmyb gold member
    October 19
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    awwww mannn

    awesome


    really really good


    good


    x

  • Synchronicity gold member
    October 18

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    A fluid manipulation

    I liked the phrase "crests of oceanic neon", it makes light sound fluid, and, overall adds to the fluidity of this piece, which seems to be the identify trait of Spinderella, even in her name. This poem is a provocative spin on motion and it's luring effects, wrapped up neatly in brief form (and yes, that was a play on words---couldn't help it--Halloween, you know...)


    • white stone
      October 19
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      lol... come into my parlor, eh?
      I wrote this for my girlfriend. She is very fluid, yes. She moves like a cat of prey. I love it.


  • sweet arrival gold member
    October 17

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    you been dj-ing? that would be a fun job... getting to sense the mood of the crowd and use that to mesmerize them in the moment. a dance, a song, the lighting, the movement of all of it combining for one memorable night. if i wasn't still sick, i might be doing that tonight instead of getting ready for bed at a way too early hour. lol.

    nice to see you back.


    • white stone
      October 19
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      Learning the tables a little... but mostly just having massive house parties with multiple DJ'S for the last 2 months (not every day of course). I was imagining what would happen if hisaddi were here. I wrote it in front of the DJ booth right next to a huge stack of speakers as lights bounced off the crowd.


  • Andi.
    October 17

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    awesome.
    just, awesome.
    thank you for sharing
    ♥ dani


  • still.she.waits
    October 17
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    I want
    I want
    to go out dancing now.


  • Cannonsfire
    October 17

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    Reminds me of a club atmosphere and music, how music can change up with lights and motion and beats. It is good to see a new one from you. C


  • findingurself.less gold member
    October 17

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    Wow! She sounds hot!! And no I am not gay, but she still sounds hot! Lol! Nice to see something from ya!


    • white stone
      October 19
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      hot is an understatement... it's about "hisaddiction", my long distance girlfriend from the site.


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 17

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    'Tis grand to see a new one from you, Scribe.



    "One shoe can change your life"
    - Cinderella



  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    October 17

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    sir stone, nice to see a new poem
    I believe spinderella is a dj so I am seeing a club scene play out here. I don't know if that was your intention but it plays out really cool in my mind. this woman can change the mood with just a couple twists and turns.

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