So Quiet

Liquor indifference
provokes silent responses to cascade
below unmoving chins...

Loving words have no place to live
for they die before being spoken...

Everything goes silent
as eyes vacate what's standing
before them...

He bangs the door shut,
she remains waiting,
.

.
the world takes pity and starts to howl

(C)Noor 10/18/2009

Author notes

Contest prompt:
No more than 50 words on word prompt: Ignore

Poem 50 words exactly.

Thanks for reading!

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A contest entry

Word Prompt: Semi-Quickie by mgmc. 800 points, ended October 20, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Any suggestions for improvement?

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zappa
November 4

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the effect is intoxicating. -and when the feeling wears away to sober? we're left standing alone, by ourselves, naked and exposed. No one person to say to us in comforting words - "I love You." Beautiful piece of writing "
Ken-Maverick
October 22

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Ah ha...
what a wonderful take on the prompt,
very deserving of the shiny!!

Ken
AngelBellerose
October 21

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this speaks volumes on the wedded bliss
no more apparent in this house
hugs always this is awesome dear Sis♥♥♥
mgmc
October 20

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Wow! I've been here so I understand the picture first hand but you paint with great skill and word choices. Who cares about prizes? Congrats on being a gifted writer! This is a wonderful piece of work! Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!
awannabepoet
October 20

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And how many times has this been played out by living, breathing and sometimes unyeilding beings.

I really enjoyed your poem, best of luck in the contest.