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Whispered silences

 

sacred silences leap

sky-tinted glass

 

clouds glide soft paths

whispering nightfall

 

above ocean's depth

peace flakes shards;

 

shavings of yester year  

cradle-rocked in breeze

 

moonlight washes

waves ashore.

 


I hear your voice

drifting amongst whispers, shards

Lord,

hear me;

I have need to talk . . .

 

 

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  • myrataal gold member
    October 26, 2009

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    Congratulations on a beautiful Silver.

    I am very proud of you, colleague and co-South African!

    Love
    Myra

  • Bhabani
    October 25, 2009

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    I loved this one so much...
    The sense of poetry is very rich and the way you have crafted your thoughts/feelings is amazing....

    I liked this one a lot.....
    I felt really like the clouds gliding the soft paths...and the cradle-rocked by the breeze.....and the last one in the end....then I hear your voice

    drifting amongst whispers, shards . . .

    Lord, hear me,

    I have need to talk
    fabulous.......great attempts!!
    All the best and all love!!!


  • MelissaluvzSheila gold member
    October 21, 2009

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    First off I must say that this is good, Very nicely done. It had a amazing flow too it. Good luck in the contest and keep up the amazing work.


  • taylorndncar gold member
    October 18, 2009

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    a very good effort. i would have tried for more subtle sound than "drowned in roar"; still good just the same...! i enjoyed it!


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    October 18, 2009

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    Ah..I have need to talk..and your tak is already begins ..and you are there in the discussion as well..well done..and many thanks for entring in my contest....


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 17, 2009

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    This is a beautiful, poignant and tender entreaty, my Friend. Good luck in the contest, Scribe.


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