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Rock-a-bye lost and a cry full of care[less].

 

 

 

 

 

i didn't know

that he had managed

to trade my sighs

for screams and that i

had fostered fate

like a membership application--

 

ticking away opportunities

like failed tests

with the tip of his sex:

 

he was a million copies

of my meanings

and my feelings unfurled

in his moments

and i wanted to open up

my urges

 

and dare him to envision

ecstasy; 

 

yet we yearned for power-plays

and splayed thighs,

whilst we dutifully adored

anything anal.

 

i dug danger from his brows

with tweezers

and feigned belief

for the very breath of his beats

 

but his voice remained

a vicious breeze

and i vied

for transformations.

 

so i tried to distort him

into overused expressions

and label him human,

until he became aware

of his created dilemmas--

 

the penny in his pocket

led an overspent existence,

when forgotten

beneath friday's fading appeal

and the hole didn't hinder

reality's ruse...

 

remembered only

when the penny fell through.

 

my knees are cold now

and i wish to kiss his scratchy cheeks,

to blow alphabets

like a blanket, across his ails

and to float to the ceiling

of his concerns

 

before i merge with hell's elements

and all is fucked.

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • The Dark Writer
    October 18

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    i struggled a little with this, mainly with the change in structure and rhythm (but thats probably just me lol), i found the contents good to read though.


  • prankstar
    October 18

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    wow. Very powerful. I read this twice and am contemplating reading it for a third time i liked it so much ^^ I really like the verse

    so i tried to distort him

    into overused expressions

    and label him human,

    until he became aware

    of his created dilemmas--

    Truly beautiful. Keep writting.


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    October 17

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    I thought you penned it brillantly!
    Lovely, and dark
    and it was astounding to read!

    well done!
    so many lines and verses
    you wrote exquisitely!

    WAY TO WRITE!
    ears/Seattle sis
    FABULOUS -Wicked - and Lovely!



  • porkypie
    October 17

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    this is a bit deep for me. I didnt understand it, sorry

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