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I can't

Finally free,
from my fifth hospital
it is all for naught

honestly?
I really meant what I said,
I really meant to stop.
But she won't leave me alone,
and I change my mind.
I can't stop.

She hands me thumbtacks,
paperclips, knives,
she tells me I should end my life

and then, oh then, I
take the blade from a pencil sharpener
screws fall to the floor
(slice)
I am in heaven,
flying above it all.

My parents will find out,
they will see the blood stained sheets,
but I can't go back
I can't

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  • thats really sad
    flows very well
    your feelings were clearly expressed
    hope your alright..