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For Andrew - A Farewell

I feel the fracture

of hearts breaking

 

the seconds sealed 

in lonely absence

of youthful essence

now unseen

 

And family arms

that circle empty

 

as palms surrender

a loving son

 

I seek to give

but a touch of solace

hoping thoughts

can proffer healing

 

yet knowing nothing

can vanquish the void

 

and the ache

can only be answered

through comfort coming

in distant echoes

 

of what is yet to be 

 

Until then

I pray peace find you

in quiet moments of

reminisce

 

and joyful reflection

on a precious soul

that years had yet

to claim 

 

Till bright blue eyes

can gaze once more

 

the trees shall

still whisper

his name...

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Andrew Ellwood
1990 - 2009
Taken too soon in a tragic car accident
Till we see you again...

 

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  • n.e.o.n gold member
    November 29, 2009

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    Oh wow. This is sad and somber, but it is.. kind of peaceful. I think this is perfect to give as is. It's your emotions at the time and thoughts. Nothing is more brillaint than that. Nicely done and keep it up.


  • Valley Girl silver member
    November 11, 2009

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    This is such a beautiful and touching piece. I am glad that you are sharing this with his family. I am speechless. My prayers are with you all.


  • azlyn gold member
    November 10, 2009

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    Oh Sweet Lady...you do not know what this verse meant to me. I understand it all too well. My blessings to every heart that breaks for this tragic loss...

    Luv you Sis...


    Az


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    November 8, 2009

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    oh my... I thought I commented on this one,
    I must have read it and didnt comment, meaning
    to come back, but with something so profound and
    deeply heart felt grief,one would not forget, I am so
    sorrysss I didnt come here earlier. I hope by the time you
    recieve this it will find you healing sss

    sad and beautifully penned Angel,
    be blessed in all you do

    love and blessings

    Rend

  • bassman4
    October 30, 2009

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    'of what is yet to be'
    may i use this is a talk my sister? What a truly magnificent writer you are, my heart was saddend by this loss, yet warmed by this simple single line.
    Stuning!


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 26, 2009

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    I think you have written this beautifully. So sad to loose one so young and so suddenly. I wouldn't change anything hunni, I think they will be touched when they read this....beautiful


  • jantastic gold member
    October 25, 2009
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  • ChangingLanes
    October 24, 2009

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    Now that is so very sad! Yet so softly written. I found my heart full and tears prick my eyes. I am sure whoever you are giving this too will be so very grateful and touched.

    I can't believe the talent on this site!


  • secberm
    October 23, 2009

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    Read this. Thought I commented... Well done, sis. We've lost too many. A whole lot these past few years. And from these dates, too young too. Write on.

    Dez


  • Ken-Maverick
    October 22, 2009

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    "I seek to give but a touch of solace hoping thoughts
    can proffer healing yet knowing nothing can vanquish the void"
    That is so awesome!! Great tribute write buddy.

    Hope all is well your way.

    Ken


  • PerfectImperfection
    October 20, 2009

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    Well, it made me cry - ok so that is a given with something sad; HOWEVER I would not change anything... For me, this seems to be completely from the heart and so very beautiful. A lovely depiction of a pain so unbearable, and the presence one soul imprinted upon the world, and the family who cherishes them. Excellent piece m'dear!!!


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    October 18, 2009

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    really touching Cugina,
    I think the family would love this
    no improvement needed...


    Tasha

  • michael fortuna
    October 18, 2009
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    Lovely write. Very emotional.


  • Amera gold member
    October 18, 2009

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    I remember reading this and I must have been called away before I could comment; I'm sorry. I love the way you put deep sentiment as only your poetic voice can do it this well.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    October 18, 2009

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    This is beautiful Jacks...

    Such a deeply personal dedication to one who has touched your heart greatly...
    You never fail to astound & impress with your gift of compassion & heart through your words...
    Awesome as always...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • notorious gold member
    October 17, 2009

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    This would be a wonderful thing to give a mourning family. Really.


  • Pure Thought
    October 17, 2009

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    Lovely dedication Jackie. I am only wondering why the italics on 'of what is yet to be' ?


    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      October 17, 2009
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      Ah I thought I had taken them off for here ... they are a message the family will understand based on our beliefs


      • Pure Thought
        October 17, 2009
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        sorry for the reply to the comment delay. I was rambling in a journal.
        I understand the words, was just curious as to the italics, is all.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    October 17, 2009

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    OMG.


  • awannabepoet
    October 17, 2009

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    May his soul rest in peace, I am so sorry to hear of this loss. Jackie all I can offer is a hug and a heart felt and sincere wish that he is now up in heaven looking down upon you and smiling as wide as can be.

  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    October 17, 2009

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    I am so sorry for your loss
    Very heartfelt and touching dedication
    the death of a child is so sad and tragic
    Perhaps a mystery in life that I shall never comprehend
    I believe that everything does happen for a resaon
    but I can't understand a death of an infant or a child
    So innocent and fragile in an often our cruel world


    Indeed he was taken too soon
    "yet knowing nothing
    can vanquish the void"
    Profoundly true

    Thank you for sharing
    Much love my friend

    David


    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      October 17, 2009
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      Thanks so much! Yes, it is hard to understand... I guess as the bible says "time and unforseen circumstance befall us all" .. yet the tragedy is still felt.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    October 17, 2009
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    i am sorry for you lost, keep it flowing


  • Mango Memories
    October 17, 2009

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  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    October 17, 2009

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    Oh hun this is truly beautiful and doesn't need one word changed. It is heartfelt and a poem the family will understand and relate to very easily. Your feelings in this are clearly and tenderly showm.
    Yes he was too young.
    Gaylene


    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      October 17, 2009
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      Thank you hun, I'm glad you thought so... gives me confidence to give it to the family


  • Randomly Beautiful
    October 17, 2009

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    It is a beautiful dedication. Loss is so terrible, and so hard to pen adequately, but you've done an amazing job here. So sorry for the loss. There seems to be so much of that lately.


    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      October 17, 2009
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      Thanks hun

      He was the baby of the family. His older brother is one of my best friends... it's such a tragic loss. And yes, it seems to be happening far too often.

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