Silences on canvas by FransB at All poetry

her being is offered no rest,

only pain; intensely layered

on coarse canvas

individually brushed

strokes escape

into togetherness; yearnings

glazed upon mind

as unspoiled journeys will continue

to give life through stained silences;

precious reminders

of a mother's love

Author notes

For a friend who recently lost her daughter.

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Tirrell
November 1
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beautiful, the punctuation to me is enough to slow us down as we read and feel it more.. Nicely done!
Tirrell
October 21

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I love this!!!!
Punctuation properly used will draw out the strength of this poem, for it should not be rushed or hurried in its reading as it is now, but savored and thought upon. I love the dramatic imagery! You have so much potential within this poem, well thought and full of loss. I am sorry for your loss, I do however sugest reading Robert Frost's poems, like the road not taken.
This is beautiful. The silence is your loss of her, the canvas is your memory of her. Like I said it shows great potential, with proper gramar and punctuation it wil be stellar. Full of emotion which is the key to fine art. For art without emotion, is not art at all... Cheers! Robert.
ps keep up the great work.
- FransB
  October 21
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  Tirrell
  Thank you; I appreciate you stopping by to comment. I often have problems with punctuation, perhaps I should do what you suggest ... to read poetry. Also, thank you for condolenses. I met wit my friend on Tuesday, and under circumstances she is doing fine. Blessings, and do enjoy the snow. Frans
CitrineSunrise
October 19

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I was so sorry to hear about your friend's tragedy. We grieve when we lose anyone we care about, but the loss of a child is a special misfortune. She is fortunate to have loving friends such as you to help her through this terrible time. May she find the peace she richly deserves. Liz
- FransB
  October 19
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  Liz
  Thank you for taking time to leave a thought. It is much appreciated. Blessings. Frans
  
  Ps
  I could not do without friends such a you, and those who commented.
Rebekah-Ann
October 19

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I do not know how you live through this horror and the idea of this is already too much for me to bear. May your friend find rest in knowing her little angel is safe from all hurt and pain.

My deepest sympathy to her and her family. May they find the answers they are searching for in the voice of the friends that they have to hold their hands.

Lovely poetry Frans. So very sorry to learn of this tragedy.
- FransB
  October 19
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  Rebekah-Ann
  Baie dankie; bedagsaam van jou en my vriendin sal dit werklik waardeer. Blessings. Frans
Cynthia Gaines
October 18

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Dear Frans,
Please accept my sincere condolences and sympathies for your friend during this heart-breaking time of her life. The loss of a child is an especially painful one, my thoughts and prayers are with her and her family. Bless you for reaching out to offer her support and comfort. One can only hope that time will begin to heal the suffering, and allow the happy memories to shine in His love. May your tender heart ever radiate, my friend. Take care.
Peace and Love,
Cynthia
- FransB
  October 18
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  Dear Cyn
  Your heart is soft and kind; comforting the words you have written. My friend will appreciate this. Hugs. Frans
Nicolette
October 18

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My heart goes out to your friend, Frans. As a mother I can only imagine a loss like this... Your poem is lovely.

I wrote this poem last year when my daughter's boyfriend died in a car accident. You can share this with your friend:

too short your summer, too soon
autumn falls through
our eyes;

between the branches
a pale day peers out -
there is silence in the trees

we stand with arms
filled with sobs, the colour
of clouds, heavy
and sunless

it’s the last day of summer,
and winter, with moist eyelids,
is already near

yet, the clear days of your smile
still surround us,
ever-blue, ever-warm

like summer,
like doves

in the light above the trees,
above the clouds

© Nicolette van der Walt

May God hold you all in the palm of His hand.

~ Nicolette
- FransB
  October 18
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  Nicolette
  Dankie. Ook vir deel van 'n stukkie seer uit julle lewe. Ek vetrou die pyn is minder. I shall convey you love to my friend; thank you for this gift. Blessings. Frans
Rowan
October 17

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I was moved by your write, and comments below. I have no words
to express how sorry I am. sigh. I have a daugher too,
- FransB
  October 17
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  Rowan
  It's nice you stopped by. You express understanding; yes, the comments and poetic 'messages' are uplifting. My friend will appreciate yours too. Blessings. Frans
Kathleen a Nazarene
October 17

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This is
such an elegant write, full of pathos & a plethora of emotion. It depicts so well the grieving process & how a Mother relives in silence the memories of her departed child. Her memories are all she can cling to in the beginning stage of her grief. She paints a picture in her mind with her memories that only she can process on her canvas.
Your years of compassion spent with others shines through all your writes Frans. Here's something you can share with your friend:

http://allpoetry.com/poem/5803779
- FransB
  October 17
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  Dear Kathleen
  Your love shines throughout your comment. Most certainly I will share your poem with my friend. May I download it for her [of course I'll add your name]. Blessings to you my friend. Frans
- - Kathleen a Nazarene
    October 18
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    Any of my writes are open to you to download & share Frans! I wrote 'A Mother Grieves' specifically for your friend & also thinking of Kelle Marie. So pray this will be useful for her.
stavykm
October 17

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- Another Mother Who Understands Your Loss Too
Losing your daughter really isn't fair,
raising her and loving on her with special care.
Your precious daughter will always be in your heart
right from your womb this love for her did start.

Oh what a precious gift your daughter has been,
but losing her now you probably feel you didn't win.
I too understand the loss as a mother of my own child,
he was to young, just twenty-four and I miss how he smiled.

It's been two years and one month since that tragic day,
I still grieve as a mother many times in different ways.
Please just know that you are not alone for I understand,
we must unite with our hearts entwined making a strong strand.

As we journey through with support from each other
with tender loving care comes from one mother to another.
Always share about your precious daughter and your grief,
for we are in mourning and somehow this does bring relief.

Always keep her alive for she truly still lives within your heart,
she always will just like my son does for me, from the very start.
Our children are really not suppose to leave before we do,
but unfortunately this is our reality and why I have no clue.

I just hope you have faith that life is much larger then we can perceive,
there is a Master Creator who loves more then we could ever conceive.
If your faith is frail just stand by another it will get you through,
Praying with an aching heart that also cries these pains with you!!!

Written by: Kelle Marie Stavron
October 17, 2009

God Bless You & I Pray That You Get All The Loving Support You Can!!!
With tears I too cry with you for your precious daughter my friend!!!
solzhenitsyn08
October 17

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A poem like "mother's love"!
The poem above "offered" me to comment the "pain intensly layered on canvas" or on the pages of your probably -already- finished book of poetry. If there had been something similar to my speculation I'm sure it could make a great relief upon the readers' soul in the case of all pains no matter intense or diluted but written-well- down by FransB!
Our great poet friend:I applaud ye...
- FransB
  October 17
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  Dear Friend
  you have given me thought; reminding me that pain is 'general' and 'specific', more so that you also understand its 'strength'. I appreciate your comments. Blessings to you. Frans
stavykm
October 17
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Oh wow Frans this is so painfully true for a parent whom has lost their precious child. As you know I know the pain of those canvases of memories. You wish you could just yank your child right out of the picture so you can hug and hold and smell and love on them, hear their voices, cries and their laughter!!! The Love For A Child is so very strong and children are the most precious gift from God besides of course our Salvation. My heart aches as I type this out for your friend but also as I still grieve for my own son!!

You are such a great friend to have and I'm sure she will find great comfort with your loving compassion and your understanding of the love you to feel for your children but knowing she is in pain from the loss of her own daughter!!!

My thoughts and prayers are with you and your friend right now and I'm here if you need me.

Wishing You And Your Friend Many Blessings,
Much Love Always,
Kelle Marie
- FransB
  October 17
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  Kelle Marie
  As always, you reach out, even within your own pain. My friend will derive strength from your words. Blessings. Frans
perfectsunset
October 17

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This was deeply beautiful,
and such a heartfelt &
honest piece to someone
grieving the loss of their
daughter. She must treasure
this dearly.
- FransB
  October 17
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  perfectsunset
  My friend is a humble soul; she will also treasure your comments. Blessing to you. Frans
Clovis...Curious
October 17

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Superb Plus +
An incredible write with a great deal of senswetivity. You certainly have expressed you thoughts quite well. Thanks for sharing.
- FransB
  October 17
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  Thank you Clovis...Curious
  you're comments are appreciated. Frans
CarolDesjarlais
October 17

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How the heart aches for your friend.

and so, it is Fall, and with her comes such beautiful endings
and goodbyes enough to tear the heart out of an angel

leafy tears fly out from faces of dear trees, and in their sorrow
are they wondrous and in their weeping there is beauty

sounds of sorrow sweep sky and burrow in under the breast,
burrows in beneath roots, and enters core of our creation

it is heard it is seen and, there is a quilt of quiet
that wraps us while numb with chill and stillness

but, oh, how soul will appreciate and sing,
once we remember to every season is a new beginning,
just as beauty ~ nay, more beautiful ~ that the one before
-Carol Desjarlais
- FransB
  October 17
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  Oh Carol
  this 'message' is so beautiful; much understanding and so uplifting. Thank you. She will appreciate this vermy much. Blessing to you. Frans
Night Hope
October 17

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As you look into these clouds thick with sorrow's rain,
remember you cannot lose what you've already gained.
They are not far from us, they are only away -
we'll be reunited with our loved ones someday.
Grief is like the tide, it ebbs and it flows -
wherever a tear falls, a new flower grows.

Blessings and empathy to you and yours.
- FransB
  October 17
  
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  My first comment
  somehow got mixed with the other. I deleted it to write this one. I appreciate the words above, as well as directing it toward your friends. Your heart is in what you do. Blessings. Frans
Sandygram
October 17

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My Prayers For Your Friend and Family
Dear Frans, I am sorry for the loss of your friend's daughter. There are no words enough to comfort. In time the beautiful memories will remain and ease the heartache. I leave this poem I wrote as I sat one day missing my dear son Brian so very much.

Brushed up against a memory,
wind I felt yet did not see.
Thoughts of you flooding my mind,
so tightly held they now unwind.

Upside down twist the hourglass,
once again let memories pass.
Each grain of sand a speck in time,
together grandiose sublime.

Turned the corner on past the why?
remembrances still make me cry.
In my chest I still feel you near,
with every heartbeat you are here.

Creep into my mind and caress,
my disguised pain and loneliness.
Empty place once shared with glee,
within my heart sweet memory.

Heavenly traveler that you be,
now living life eternally.
You are in my thoughts today,
everyday since you went away.

Peace and Grace, Sandy
- FransB
  October 17
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  A beautiful poem
  Sandy; thank you for sharing this. I'm sure my friend will reap much blessings from it. Frans
Peteskid
October 17

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Silence will grow in time, until a day
when the joy of having will exceed the pain of letting go,
a silence that will soothe like a balm,
remembering the life of the past,
the way our memories walk with us,
love so strong it will always be at our side.

We are not here for easy reasons,
for love itself is not an easy thing,
but we hold it, and it holds us.
The silence that will come,
will reveal blessings we already know,
and they will be cloaked in peace.

Thank you Dear Friend, my prayers go with you and your friend...

PK
- FransB
  October 17
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  Ah, what precious words
  you have given; these will surely be appreciated. Blessings to you PK for such wonderous words. Frans
malmadre
October 17

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The title is so meaningful, many years ago, I was commissioned to paint a portrait of a daughter who had perished in an overturned vehicle, working with photographs, I grew to know this girl, the corners of her smile, the laughter in her eyes. I know her face almost as well as my own living daughter's face.
I understand their need for the portrait.
Poetry serves the same purpose, the words can offer solace.
A tender poem is a proper offering, I can only imagine the intense grief.
- FransB
  October 17
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  Thank you
  Life offers so many links; the mention of the portrait and poem. Thank you for mentioning this; also for your time to visit this poem. Blessings to you. Frans
MargaretG
October 17

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I am reminded of my sister in law, whose son died suddenly at work in June. There is no rest, all we can do is cry together for the tragedy and loss. We are not alone, even when the loss is so deep.
- FransB
  October 17
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  Hello Margaret
  I thought of you after hearing of the death of my friend's daughter; therefore not surprised you mentioned your nephew's death. You know loss. Thank you for visiting. Frans
Pamela A Lamppa
October 17

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I cannot even fathom the loss of one of my children... My heart is heavy for such loss and I wish your friend and family - peace.

Your last stanza is so beautiful "to give life through stained silence" - truly says it all. We never forget, we just get "used" to it. Thank you for sharing this one with me.

~Pamela
- FransB
  October 17
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  Pamela
  I so appreciate your comment. My friend will truly be blessed by your words. Blessings. Frans
penman
October 17

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Powerful
So very sad to face such a loss. What a wonderful write. Thank you for sharing
- FransB
  October 17
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  Thank you
  for commenting; I appreciate this very much. Frans
PrabhuDayal Khattar
October 17

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Ah...how sad..? Hum.this is what the life is..Kindly convey my sentiments to the mother. It is really very painful..and your poetry makes the truth sketched ...
- FransB
  October 17
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  Thank you
  for stopping by. I shall do as you request. Blessing. Frans
AliceinPoetryLand
October 17

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Oh how sad but beautifully penned. That title is just perfect too. This is truly heartwrenching and please convey my condolences. I have a daughter of my own.So tragic.
With all the memories she will have strength.
Gaylene
- FransB
  October 17
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  Gaylene
  Thank you; your friendship is much appreciated. Frans
taylorndncar
October 17

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a very good effort! "...Stained silences..." says a lot about grief and respect. a good metaphoric poem!
- FransB
  October 17
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  Good morning my friend
  glad you stopped by. I appreciate your comments. Frans
myrataal
October 17

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I know of her burdens ...
and I also know that all the riddles of this life is cleared in Eternal Life. We can but hold and comfort, in silence, as you did in this wondrous poem and do in real life.

She will not remember me, but please give her my regards and love.

Edengroete,
Myra
- FransB
  October 17
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  You are so receptive
  thank you for reading. I intend to end the poem together with its comments to her. Blessings. Frans