I need to know you
the way the city sidewalks
knew me that autumn,
they were intimate
and I was lonely.
© Oisin
A contest entry
- 21 by Connor Blackbird.
700 points, ended October 22, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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How come that autumn and falling leaves always leave us nostalgic and make us remember "falling"? So beautiful and soft this is, Scott... hope your autumn is beautiful.
~ Nicolette
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I like this, but I'm not convinced by that ending. The reasoning given seems too easy. I know that sounds ridiculous when you only had 21 words, but that was part of the challenge inherent - how much can you say in such a short space? I like the simplicity of this piece, but I'm worried about whether or not it really says anything besides, well, what it says.
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Ahhh, Scribe. You do melancholy so well. Good luck in Connor's contest. 
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