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You are so naive, thinking you can describe life with words

Do you seriously beleive that I don't remember
also?
That every second of my life,
waking and asleep,
is taken up by the struggle to
forget

without forgetting.

the memories of my childhoodm
our childhood,
of quiet summer afternoon picnics,
and snow days spent laughing and playing,
lost in our oblivion,
the days flew, immortal.

I am haunted by the disconnect
from my life now,
from how the memories have turned shallow
and meaningless,
cloudy and distant,
blurred light in the sharp black photograph
of the present.

Do you seriously beleive that I don't remember
also?



Author notes

Prompt: "It would be good to give much thought, before you try to find words for something so lost,
for those long childhood afternoons you knew
that vanished so completely -and why?"

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  • n.e.o.n
    October 31

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    I feel that you followed the prompt. However, I felt that this is unfinished. I would've liked to know what memories you're referring to. On the other note, I liked the bluntness you used. I think many people are naive at times. Thanks for entering and good luck.