I loved you and yet I ripped out your heart,
To save you from the me only I could see,
I write this now not hoping for new start,
But to explain what caused the end of we.
Just what I felt, I could not say,
But sure to change into my father,
That price I could not make you pay,
Breaking up with you much rather
Still I wanted you to know and hope,
That you can let this go and find peace,
This note is not meant to be a rope,
To reel you in but rather to release
Forgive me, please.
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A contest entry
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1100 points, ended October 18, 12 entries
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Lovely write simple and lucid and so very touching and captivating that it glows as an eternal dawn in the sky of imagination.The honesty in the write is absolutely amazing like a breath of fresh redolent breeze.The imagination is very vividly portrayed.Broze was completely well deserved.Thanks for sharing this one and keep sharing and take care always...
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Hmmm.... I don't want to like it....It's too carefree, but I do like it! Does that make sense? LOL Anyway good write!
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Thanks, not meant to be carefree...........oops! But trying to sidestep whiny, tragic, etc..........not an easy task....best of luck w/real thing.
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Oh wow!
what an interesting poem (and striking picture) I loved the way you wrote this, it spoke volumes about love and sacrifice. well crafted and lovely to read.
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wonderfully done. i like the feeling with which you convey the message.
well written.
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Wonderful
What a great write. And so very well expressed. Best of luck in the contest
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Marlene, this is a really nice rhyming poem, it adresses the prompt in a nice manner almost too nice but that is poetry for you.
Personally I think I would either make it a teary eyed affair or a madder than hell thing.
But you did it just right, the proper balance actually.
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