Her eyes are shining,
she watches the door,
she's chattering, chattering,
curled up on the floor...
she's been waiting, waiting,
for him to come home
because all this time without him
she's felt so alone.
He's her sun,
the reason she's bright
and she's waiting for him
to hold her all night...
and the clock ticks,
it chimes on the hour
and she holds her breath
with all of her power.
The doorknob wiggles,
she jumps to her feet
and she runs to the door
for a kiss and greet...
and who walks in,
other than no one,
and darkness takes over;
there's no more sun.
Her breath is strangled,
she knew you weren't true,
how could she be so lucky
to get a guy like you?
The truth sets in,
it sinks into her heart
as tears streak down her pale face
and she falls apart...
so much time
that she spent waiting for you
and in the end
you didn't even come through.
You backed out,
you couldn't even try
and in the end
you just made her cry.
And she sits on that floor,
she's so very alone,
watching that door...
wishing you'd just come home.
Be brutally honest [but nice..]!
Comments
1 - 12 of 12
-
Wow! I love so many of your poems, but this one particularly caught my eye. I'm not usually a huge fan of rhyming, but this is so nicely done. You capture emotion so perfectly, and while it made me sad that's what makes it so fantastic.
-
I was really able to feel in this poem! and im not a big fan of rhyming but this might just change my mind!
-
I'm brutally honest...
when I say that the rhyming in this was fantastic! It was a sad poem though and I was sad at the end of reading this...but it only means you have talent.
-
the expectation
love the introduction that present a heart of expectancy.the reader of this poem too is left expecting till the end. keep penning.
-
Really like it.
Really sad
Cant complain.
Makes me feel really sad. I can relate so......
-
really descriptive poem, i really dug it,
i think the title could be a little stronger than it is, but other than that, i thought it was great. keep up the awesome work
-
this is a good poem. i can feel what she's feeling. you did a really good job of creating the mood and it has a very nice flow.
-
A very real poem. I can sense the sorrow.
-
This is so beautiful and sweet, love., until about half way through.
The soft tenderness becomes a soft sorrow that grows with each chord.
Well, well done.
Love you
<3
-
Oh my goodness.
This is amazing.
Wow. This is so sad but it's beautiful.
Wow. I have no words. It's perfect.
-
So sad...it really left me silent after i read it. Very heartfelt. I love the stanza
And she sits on that floor,
she's so very alone,
watching that door...
wishing you'd just come home.
So amazing. Keep on writting. -
liking this a lot i can not give youtechnical stuff im only a beginer i found it beautifully sad
Adding your comment:
1 - 12 of 12
