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Heart

Dark mountain stood alone still,
birds chirped, flowers bloomed
but he indifferent...

From distant land-
a breeze came
touched heart,
stringed soul
"Ah! Nice", he thought
breeze moved on
like time
"you're not"....
Again thought.

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  • Blue-Rose Beauty
    October 17
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    From distant land-
    a breeze came
    touched heart,
    stringed soul

    Ooh. I love those lines.

    Great job and thanks for entering.


    • amnouup
      October 17
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      Thank you

      Dear thanks for the appreciation that inspires to work hard

  • amnouup
    October 16
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    Thanks

    Thanks you liked my work


  • John BoSox
    October 16
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    Great job on thie..I can feel your emotion..congrats

    John

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