There is goes
Steadfast heart racing
Feet sound like thunder
Its feathers flash like lightning
No pony can match its speed
People dream of owning one
Its cry has a favored melody
Alas! Finally waking up from its dream
To be born is all but a mellow fanasty
A contest entry
- big bang prewrite contest round 1 - 3 by serenity silvermoon.
2100 points, ends December 12, 552 entries
• next poem in this contest, • Add to finalists list, or remove from contest
What Fanasty Bird is this?
Comments
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Big Bird? LOL! I don't know... amybe Roadrunner!
Very cute! I like this. A few things though... line 3 'Feet sound like thunder' I think maybe sounding would be better. Line 4 the same thing with flash... try flashing. Line 8, Finally instead of finially. Other than that... a wonderfully sweet lil poem. Keep the ink flowing.
~Donna~
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Again thank you so much. I will learn from my mistakes and make my newer poems better.
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