When the world is mine,
Your death will
not be quick or painless
(he’s got the whole world…)
I tried to be a kind of savior
but in the end you took my gifts
and corrupted them into this.
(he’s got the whole wide world…)
This world of am-pathetic
mind numbing sin fueled waste
of all blessings bestowed upon it.
(he’s got the whole world..)
Paradise is truly lost
and in it’s place you
have build a hollow satire of it.
(he’s got the whole wide world…)
Cause of my vision,
you have made me the devil,
cause of my dreams I am your enemy.
(he’s got the whole world…)
So be it, neither friend nor
foe shall escape my vision of hell,
the only fairness in life you will received.
(he’s got the whole wide world…)
All young or old,
man or woman,
every race and creed.
(He’s got the whole world…)
You will all know
when the time has come,
and the world is mine.
(he’s got the whole world in his hands
He’s got the whole wide world in his hands)
Author notes
can't really say it is like riding a bike for me here, just trying to get my voice back and get a feel for my pen. but this kind of just came to me and i went with it. Hope you like it and hope that there will be more to come. I hope, keep it flowing
i do plan to edit so any and all advise is welcome, or just drop a line and tell me what you think
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I like the tension between your words and the words of the song - it's like background music in a Freddy Kruger movie for me, highlights the depths!
You give me so much support and encouragement, and I know I'm slack about repaying the favour, but I'm glad I called in and read this. It's got my ideas rolling - you'll know when I use them, I guess!
Keep that pen dipped, keep them coming.
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thanks for the support and i will be looking for it, come back anytime you can i look forward to it.
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POWERFUL
I ENJOYED THIS ALOT ALMOST LIKE THE LAST ONE LAUGHS THE HARDEST AND BEST...ITS ALWAYS GOOD TO STICK IT TO SOMEONE WHO HAS IGNORED UR PLEAS OR DIDNT TAKE U SEROIUSLY AT ALL...SWEET ARMAGEDDON...SWEET INDEED. -
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someone who gets ,it, lol. thanks for the comments,
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Perfect! I love how you used the song.
Everything in between each 'chorus' sent chills and the 'chorus' only compounded them.
Eerie sense of doom speaks loud and clear here!
Excellent poem
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thank you means a lot to me
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Aaron
I really like this poem and while I was reading it that christian song was playing in my head everytime I read the line, keep up the good work
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it was playing in my head as i wrote it so i know how you feel, thank for stopping by
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This is great poetry. I think everyone has heard that song and I didn’t know who wrote or sung it so I looked it up. I found that there are many different variations of the work so this one is another of the original variations and I think it’s brilliant.
Love,
Amera♥
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coming from you seriously that is an honor, thank you, and i am glad you liked it.
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That's it my friend...to use your words...keep it flowing! Great write and welcome back to the wonderful world of poetry! Look forward to more
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thank you that means a lot, i am glad to be back and trust there will be more
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I honeslty got excited when I saw that you wrote something.
You haven't written in a long time, that is true. But I must say, it's still just as magnificent as your other stuff.
I especially like this
"So be it, neither friend nor
foe shall escape my vision of hell,
the only fairness in life you will received."
You're brilliant with words.
Don't let that pen stop flowing again, please?
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i will try not to keep you waiting for another one too long. thanks for stopping by
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Its certainly not like riding a bike, can be hard after not writing for a while. You have done a good job with this tho, powerfully delivered. I like the song you've added in, made something usually associated with a happy tune seem sinister. Very neatly penned hunni, good to see you back! Look forward to reading lots, lots more!
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lol took you long enough to comment, lol, thank i am glad you liked it
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AAhh I am not on all the time like I used to be, I only call in now and again these days...to busy
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that's okay, just nice that you stopped by
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you're going to kill me? lol
powerful poem , i like how you wrote it
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who me......
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yes.lol
*hugs*
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VERY DEEP MESSAGE
I ENJOYED THIS VERY MUCH ALMOST LIKE ONE HAD THE CHOICE TO CHOOSE WHAT HIS OR HER FATE WILL BE. MAKING U THE JUDGE FOR GOOD AND EVIL...ALL LTHE MORE POWERFUL....THIS WAS HONEST AND TRUE...
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lol... i think i gave the wrong message then, they don't have a choice,lol. thanks for the words
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I feel sufficiently threatened by this piece and now I am scared. I like how you took a happy hippy song and made it frightening. Good job.
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i aim to please, glad you liked it
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hope to read that nore to come sounds like you are picking back up and going good write and everything allright oh and that poem death note i was in the hospitabul for the night good to have friends high up hay now take care of yourself im still reading
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thanks for the support means a lot to me, take care of yourself too
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