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Fatal Swallow Of Desire's Fire--Kills the Soul!Ignites the Demon's Toll

leather-seduction
like quicksand

                                    can be a desperately captivating
                                                    scent










fatal, once
the eye desires!


                                                        Beware!







                                                          fleshes spell.

Author notes

AND---QUICKSAND---BE---ANYWHERE---THEM---TRUSTED---SEXY---BAD---SEDUCTION---FULLNESS---BABY---LAY---CLOSER---BREAST---CRUSH---SHAMEFUL---IT---FATAL---IS---TOGETHER---IN---FOLLOW---FOR---GLASS---THE---SUGGEST---THEY---EYES---CRIME---YOU---WRECK---HAS---ONCE---HER---SPELL---FINGERS---HE---BEGAN---DESPERATELY---HAD---HARD---SHE---SCENT---ASTRAY---TO---THAT---LIAR---LASTED---CRASHING---LEATHER---EXPLORE---ENTWINED---FLESH---CHARM---EDGE---STROKE---DUSK---CHANCE---HIM---SAID---ASS---NECK---WANT---CHANCE---WE---NO---YES---TOMORROW---HELD---DESIRE---CAPTIVATE---WHISPER---NAUGHTY---TOUCH---FRAGILE---CAN---AFRAID---WHEN---THEN---SWEAT--HUSH---LIPSTICK---BEWARE---SMIRK---WEDGE---BELONGED---THERE---HERE---MY---LIKE---HATE---A---S--ER---ES--T--NT--ED---

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Comments


  • Sonya-Erasmus silver member
    October 16
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    Ooooh, I will always admire your writing skill
    Well done
    Best of luck to you
    Sonya

  • msbeeautch2u
    October 16

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    Double Take

    I had to read it almost 4 times..with the last time out loud an slow. It takes a moment to "hear" it. I do like it tho..I think your "leather-seduction like quicksand" will probably be my favorite 4 words put together out of this contest. Those 4 words speak VOLUMES!!! If you change anything...DO NOT CHANGE THOSE 4 WORDS AS THE OPENING!! lol
    Thanks and Good Luck