You leave me breathless.
You alone can reach out and touch my soul.
You captivate my very essence...
Take it. Keep it.
I am now yours eternally.
Strip me bare and stand here with me...
Naked on the hushed breeze of Twilight.
Kiss me like you've never kissed me before,
I need you. My love I breathe your name each day.
You are my waking thought.
You laugh in my dreams
Your eyes glistening in the sunlight.
See that field?
Take my hand.
Run with me through the moonlight corn.
Dance round the fire like a madman,
lie with me 'till I fall asleep.
All I ever truly ask of you now...
Whisper you love me and will never leave me.
My love...
Heaven is here.
A contest entry
- Prewrites. ♥ by GraveyardGoddess.
400 points, ends November 27, 409 entries
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For a special someone. x
Comments
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AWWWWW! this is adorable!!!! I love it!!!
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Great
i must say you did and very well prceived job on this one the words flowed greatly and the words you chose and great as well but there is only two parts i can find that are out of sync
You laugh in my dreams
Your eyes glistening in the sunlight.
first one need to be better-You fly with me endearingly in my dreams.
second-Your eyes glisten like the morning sun, I get lost in them.
the other one
Run with me through the moonlight corn.
could be better with the wording-Run with me with agile bliss through the moonlit grass.
other than this take of mine you did a great job on well done
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Beautiful... I swear you haven't posted anything in a while! Ah well. This is lovely.
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