Its not my fault,
Please don't blame me,
Im not as strong,
as id like to be.
We love each other,
We both know that,
I don't want to loose you,
I feel such a prat.
I miss you so,
Each and every day,
miss your soft touch,
the things you say.
I just feel so lost,
Without you here,
I need you close,
wont need to fear.
If I could be,
with you my dear,
I would be happy,
for long a year.
But life's to short,
To wait for me,
Don't wanna loose you,
but it mite have to be.
A contest entry
- I'll Never Forget You... by Walking Oxymoron.
700 points, ended November 3, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
Comments
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*Lose!!
Hay, why would you feel a prat??
I love that you can still verbalize it though... it's what I love about you, you;re so simple and so honest in what you say.
My favourite stanza...
I miss you so,
Each and every day,
miss your soft touch,
the things you say.
It was filled with such soft longing!
I feel your pain, and it makes me sad...(and with that word, I sound like a five year old.)
The last stanza? So negatively, and so defeatist!!
Fight for your love!! Yes, you may have had issues, but now you have your degree, and everything appears to have settled some...
Appears...
Maybe it's ti me for you to be happy? -
hey ya Hay this is great- made me feel the sadness of this horrid reality
good luck in the contest.. a few sp mistakes and grammer corrections will make this much better (you know what T's like) hehe 
Great work though xx
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