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~Breathe~

Missing image

 

 

 

 

 

From a window,
the full moon casts a silvery

blue radiance and sees my

nakedness.

 

 

 

 

~Tonight I am stirring..

hungry is the word that comes

to mind.

　

 

　

My body is speaking a

language only you know,

I am sweltering in desire.

 

 

 

 

I am in no mood to be a

lady, or even think about

praying.

 

 

 

 

Before this night ends,

I want to be taken without

question.

　

 

 

To feel your touch so

deep in my skin that it hurts

to breath,

　

　

and yes.

　

 

Oh yes, to be devoured,

licked, and tasted like I was

your last meal.

 

 

 

 

 

Clinging to you.

 

 

 

 

I want my body to shake

with each wave, as it ripples

up my spine,

 

 

 

 

 finally then will I breathe,

and not one moment 

 

 

  ~before.

 

 

 

        

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  • Mango Memories
    November 26
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    yum.


  • Naughtygrlred
    November 25
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    Seccccceeee.... great poem made feel as I was there


  • Sector-Hunter silver member
    November 18
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    The passion and longing in this for that oh so tasty tocuh. I can see why you took gold. This set the screen on fire great work here made me swim like in the poem. SH

  • Bruce silver member
    November 18
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    Rend, this is wonderfully sensual and well deserving of the gold. Congratulations! You certainly know how to create mood!


  • Melee Vau gold member
    November 13
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    ravenously sensual. great write!


  • Ani Grace
    November 9
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    Hungry comes to mind... to be devoured...
    your imagery is phenomenal.


  • SteveS gold member
    November 6

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    Smooth and silky. A nice creation of desire. This has, as I feel it, a delicate lacy feel with a strong hunger beneath, as the power blooms from it's fragility. Well done.


  • poetryality silver member
    October 30

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    You reached the "sensual peak" and achieved GOLD to boot. The splendor in these words is awe-inspiring, and makes me want to run to my husband. I am at my daughter's sitting my grandson and he is at home. But with words like these I can savor the moment, and make it last. Beautiful, and tastefully written. CONGRATULATIONS!


    Much Love ♥

    Renee


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 31
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      thank you so much ss
      Renee, I so aprecitate your thoughts
      and clappies, love and blessings

      Rend


  • GuiltedShadow gold member
    October 28
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    I see why you took gold with this. Well deserved. Another write meeting perfection.


  • woodymiles silver member
    October 26

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    Mouthwatering,delicious and totally abandoned. Oh to be lost in that lustful moment. A crimson ovation all around his thespian seed. Great stuff.


  • Debra A Baugh gold member
    October 26

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    sultry

    i love this piece seductive flare......made you feel the intensity of its meaning......sultry on display......having it your way......not in the mood to be a lady or to pray.......wanting it your way.......leaving nothing else to say......gr8 seduction penned........love it..............LP&H


  • smitaanand
    October 24

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    so sensuous, so delightfully passionate and so erotic that I sit craving for my husband fast asleep miles away.The write is not gauche or uncleen but sublime with honest emotion and joy in the embrace of love a blessing in life.The images painted and desires expressed are steamy and make desire soar.The gold trophy is well deserved.Thanks for sharing take cae and alwys share...


  • Roland Welles gold member
    October 24

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    Love the feeling conveyed of not be able to surrender, "release", or even breathe, until that moment of complete surrender, desire, hunger, etc. is satisfied... Very sensual and "steamy"... My favorite is:
    "I am in no mood to be a
    lady, or even think about
    praying. "
    Conveys that desire, or hunger, or lust, etc. so well in the willingness to give up so much for itl... Honestly, I don't usually write comments like this, but I respect you and love this one so much, that I question if the first stanza is needed at all... It's beautifully written don't get me wrong, but also seems out of "tone" with the whole and starting with:
    "~Tonight I am stirring..
    hungry is the word that comes
    to mind."
    seems to just fit better as the poem focuses on the desire, needs, etc. of the "writer".... The moon and nakedness don't stregthen or hurt the whole, but just a little awkward to me... Regardless, you definately deserved the gold!!! Thanks for sharing and take care!!!
    Peace,
    Russell


  • glenn shannon silver member
    October 23
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    phew this was full of intenity and passion loved it cold shower required after reading cool work indeed glenn


  • Daizee silver member
    October 23
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    Rend, my sultry sis... you do steam so well


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    October 23

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    ...uh, yeah, this works. Excuse me, I need some fresh air…whoa!


    One of the most sensual things I've read in a long time.

    Congrats on the gold.

    mj.


  • Andre ben-YEHU
    October 23
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    Eternally applausable.

    "~Breathe~" ignites the libidinal dynamo, polishes the wings of sensual imagination; its mellifluous voice attracts the hummingbirds of carnal love. It is a flower whose petals diffuse essence of togetherness, and perfume of bliss carried and blown by winds of true love.

    I have enjoyed the reading of the sublime lines of "~Breathe~", a majestic poem.

    In respect and admiration,

    Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    October 23

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    I like to read a woman who knows her own mind and just what she wants ... an incredibly sensual piece that's very hot!

    Well deserving of the gold ... congratulations.

    Sue

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 26
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      thank you so much Sue,
      coming from you, i am am honored
      I have read your poetry and it is
      just awesome!!!

      love and blessings

      Rend


  • My Chronos gold member
    October 23
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    This was so very good. I enjoyed it so much.


  • geckogirl silver member
    October 23

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    Woohoo girlfriend you rock.. very sensual yet horny as hell...

    I am in no mood to be a
    lady, or even think about
    praying.

    lol girlfriend who is going to be a lady when we are in this position

    Congrats on the Gold bling hon... a very deserving golden pen indeed....


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 23
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      its that the truth but...
      I do have my preference
      thank you so much for your comment

      love to you

      Rend


  • bigperm gold member
    October 23

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    You have quite a gift for erotica...

    I can sometimes pull of sensual, but most of my writes err on the cynical side. This I had to read twice...it was quite a beathe of fresh air in its delivery and thought. You deserve every ounce of gold.


  • Swan song gold member
    October 23
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    i need to find my blood pressure medication!!!! you going to kill me!! This was very very good and worthy of the gold for sure!!!

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 23
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      I so value your thoughts, I know the brillance
      of your poetry, and I am humble by your comment
      thank you so much jeff, ss

      love and blessings

      Rend

  • Pogo7747
    October 22
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    This is very well done. Senuous and sesual. It speaks volumes. You manage to capture ecstasy


  • Beautiful-N-Broken silver member
    October 22

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    Oh my goodness! Excellent write! I enjoyed reading this from start to finish and it is so sensual. I love it!


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 23
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      Thank you little mamma
      your thoughts are so apreciated ss

      love & blessings

      Rend

  • Bob Fox
    October 22

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    Wow

    Perspiration . And then those long ago memories when these words were transformed into deeds. Again the sweat trickles down my chest thinking of those divine pleasures. Delicious write poet.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 23

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      thank you so much Bob,
      your comments are always
      apreciated ss

      Love & blessings
      Rend


  • IVth Tribulation
    October 21
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    O.o

    This poem made me breathe in deep and hold it.


  • MaggieWrites
    October 21
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    Wow, well written, i like the "tasted like I was your last meal" and sweltering is such a great word!

  • Bruce silver member
    October 21

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    Wow! I see why this one won the gold! It's super sensual, but there's something more: there's a longing, a yearning that's very powerful. It's not a wistful, melancholy yearning but one determined to be fulfilled! Great job on this!


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 21
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      thank you so much for your visit,
      I so apreciate your thoughts

      love & blessings

      ~Rend


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    October 20

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    Awww did you write this for me? Just kidding!

    It was special.



    Congrats on the shiny gold.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 20
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      how did you guess,?
      thank you so much for your comment and clappies

      ~R


  • chael
    October 20
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    I need a cold shower

    You have a way, Beautiful write......chael


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 20
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      thank you Chael
      I appreciate your comments
      and support,

      love and blessings

      Rend


  • Angel-of-Pain
    October 20

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    i have always tried to write what i felt on this ... subject and it never comes out the way i want it...it is always different each time. and congratz on finding the words. very well done and i love the ending.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 20
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      thank you so much for
      your comment and clappies
      love and blessings

      Rend


  • Soft-Rain gold member
    October 20
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    Congrats on that Gold ..You earned it!!!!!!!!!!!!


  • laura0757 gold member
    October 16

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    i love this poem, as I do other's senual and erotica is one of my favorites, but this pales in comparison...I do that a lot...I like the part where you say your not in the mood as far as being a lady, and praying me on a personal note I do that in my car not in my boudoir..............lol................good luck in the contest,,,,,all the best


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 20
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      <

      Thank you for your support
      I so apreciate you coming to read
      love and blessings

      ~Rend


  • brochoppie
    October 16

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    I really enjoyed this one! Thanks so much for sharing and I wish you luck in your contest. It was beautifully written! I like your type and flow of writing. I think this is something that everyone has experienced or would want to experience. The person this is written about is a lucky person and must be very flattered by your words. This is something that I`ve felt and thought, but never had the words to say. I look forward to reading others from you. It`s hard for me to pick a favorite part, but the ending said it all to me.

    finally then do I breathe,

    and not one moment





    ~before.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 19
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      <

      thank you so much for stopping by!
      and commenting!! I so apreciate your
      support.

      love and blessings

      Rend


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    October 16

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    Oh you are naughty
    I love it.. its perfect, its beautiful its sensuality in motion
    a true craft you have here hun
    Wishing you all the best in the contest and for all your future poems
    With love

    Julie x


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 19
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      <

      Julie
      Thank you so much for stopping ss
      I always apreciate you!!

      Love and blessings

      ~Rend


  • ariazephyrzoe gold member
    October 16

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    very very sensual in a very exquisite way

    every reader would go mmmmm in every lines
    I have to admit that I did
    your poem does that

    beautiful Rend


  • iluvsasuke
    October 19
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    this was so good. I loved it. and i know what you mean. I love it when my lover touches and devours me. anyways this was exellent


  • Rachel Vargas
    October 19

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    wow

    i must say i love the description the way you actually make me feel your desire for this. and the picture help out to prove your point wow


  • Dajuan
    October 19
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    This poem is evidence that the passion you have is geniune.Image it confess is elegant, as well lustful.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 21
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      my friend Dajuan,
      I am so happy to see you, your support
      is so appreciated ss
      love and blessings

      Rend

  • Winwood
    October 19

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    The most touching prose I have read from a lady who is so in touch with everything sensual...your passion undeniable...I am in awe..

  • darck lord
    October 19
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    this poem is magnificent, it can use some more understandible vocabulary, but i loved i


  • Moonlightdragon gold member
    October 19

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    Lovely Poet how fine are your penned words that flow from the heart. I am enchanted by each as if blessed by the silver glow of the lady of the moon above.

    "My body is speaking a
    language only you know,
    I am sweltering in desire"

    These Lines touch the dept of my soul and are the words which are the essence and passion of love.


    Love and Light
    robert


  • Mzdimpl3zifyanasty
    October 19
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    Amazing

    OH MY LAWD That was beyond amazing


  • penman gold member
    October 18
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    Wow

    So very sensual and beautifully written. Congrats on the gold. It was well deserved

  • usb poetry
    October 18
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    Great.

    Thank you for writing this. its awesome.


  • tara wilson gold member
    October 18

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    yes, it does feel like a holding of breath until the release comes at the end, this one builds like sensual tension - a lovely poem, congrats


  • Xianaria gold member
    October 18
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    Congrats on the Gold!
    This is sooo well deserving!!!!

    sss

    ~ Tim

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 18
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    Absolutely stunning to read from beginning to end, thank you for entering and good luck in my contest, Josie


  • Swangrnv gold member
    October 18

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    oohhh jeez..

    GULP..this is hot hot hott!!! damn.. i need a bucket of ice for to rest my head in! ..uhm did i say this was hot?? wowzers.. very sensually pleasing my friend..
    two thumbs and uhm..something else up..


  • Desire gold member
    October 17

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    Holy Mother of Pearl Jam!

    You just singed my eyebrows

    Geesh~ I have not felt this much Heat
    since....
    before I created my two Muchkins
    Oy~ You just go on with Your Hot Self

    Is that legal~ body shivering and shaking
    like that
    Looks in AP Law books Yep it sure is...
    Hot! Hot!~~~~I'm trying to type and
    my letters are jumping all over the place
    Down syllables Down...Wapish!

    Love this!

    Keep that quill dancing
    Thank You for sharing Your Um...tame nature~
    Yeah that's it
    Best wishes in the contest~
    with love & light~ Desire~*~

  • Soft-Rain gold member
    October 17

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    Okay where is bob? under the bed ..lol
    Wow sweetie this is so sensual erotic and way hot!
    I personally loved all of it...brings out the love and passion in all who reads.
    (What do you mean you can't make it with the big dogs ..girl you topped us all.)
    One thing i feel when i read your work is the rememberce of the first conversation we had and i hope i steered you right.
    As this shows me i did into a beautiful sensual woman...
    you have emerged into your own style.

    Okay my favorite lives:

    I am in no mood to be a

    lady, or even think about

    praying.









    Before this night ends,

    I want to be taken without

    question.


    Fantastic,
    Love always,
    ~Lisa~


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 20
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      Oh and thank you for the congrats
      that means alot to me s

      love & blessings

      Rend

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 19
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      I said to my self who's bob? and I asked
      someone who bob was and girl I laugh out
      loud at work! and really turned red!
      I have never used bob thank you so much for
      your comment and clappies s so
      apreciate your support thanks for the clues
      cause i was clueless

      love to you

      Rend


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    October 17

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    Well that was hot! You did a fantastic job with portraying the emotion of desire.
    Thanks for sharing this with me.
    Best of luck in the contest.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • Nevel
    October 17

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    "....tasted like I was your last meal" funny...A serene set up of your poem Rend, really lovely..."I am in no mood to be a lady" this line says so much already....sensual done. Keep breathing I love your short pointed stanzas.
    Erwin


  • jackreed3 gold member
    October 17

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    Very nice thats why I want to write with you... we would be. great....
    escellent poem.... JackReed3...


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    October 17

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    Wow
    This is indeed sensuality at its best
    Very hot and steamy as well

    The following stanzas are awesome...
    "My body is speaking a
    language only you know,
    I am sweltering in desire...

    Oh yes, to be devoured,
    licked, and tasted like I was
    your last meal."

    Deliciously erotic
    Cold shower awaits

    Wish you the best in the contest

    David





  • Amera gold member
    October 17

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    O wow! This is dreamy and now I want to go make love.
    Standing ovations and cold showers!

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Blueskywonder
    October 17
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    Holding onto sensation with erotic determination, ready to release substance with essenceVery Good!


  • S.Hunt
    October 17

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    Very well done. Soft and sensual tone, great flow. I like the form too, easy and pleasant to read. The third stanza is my favorite, lines 21 and 22, here is where you captured the intimacy the picture conveys. Superb!
    "My body is speaking a
    language only you know,
    I am sweltering in desire."


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    October 16

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    Lusciously written
    rich in texture and absolutely DIvine!
    WAY TO WRITE
    and Release the beauty and passion
    that SHINES IN ALL OUR SOULS!

    Applause-applause-applause!
    ears/seattle sis


  • awannabepoet
    October 16

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    See this is what I am talking about a lady in life and a woman under the sheets... hmmm damn fine poetry Rend.



    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 19
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      Finally! a man that knows what i tried to convey
      love it! thank you my friendsss
      love and blessings

      Rend


  • Rick Weston silver member
    October 16

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    i love this: "my body is speaking a language only you know" as it conveys such a deep lovely connection - physically and so much more.


    beautifully work capturing the sense of lover's need.

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 19
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      Thank you Rick,

      sorry it has taken me so long to return
      but will be there soon ss

      love abd Blessings

      Rend


  • jazzcat gold member
    October 16

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    Beautiful, sensual, fun...what great style you use to convey your message! I like the way this is drawn out, like trying to catch your breath. You build up the tension so that we are dying to breathe with you! Keeping your reader so closely tied (emotionally and physically) to your words is a gift! Great job!

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 19
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      Thank you so much Dane,
      I did read your poem and it is breathtaking!
      you should post it, It is for better written
      than mine will ever be my friend
      just stunning!!

      love and blessings

      Rend


  • csmmoms2
    October 16
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    Stunning


  • z etoile
    October 16
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    great job


  • Deceits Tears silver member
    October 16

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    Very steamy, very sensual, you have penned a voyage into a sensual fantasy we all wish we had
    Beautiful !!!!
    All the best to you in the contest my friend

    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 16
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      <

      I am honored to have you
      come by to read and the clappies
      are much appreciated,

      with love and blessings

      Rend


  • Garmond gold member
    October 16

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    You express the feeling of deep, powerful desire with perfect clarity here Rend. As a reader you can feel the raw energy these words purvey. Great expression. It is always a pleasure reading you. (no pun intended either) Good luck in the contest.


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      October 19
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      thank you so much for your
      comment and clappies my friend
      I so apreciate you

      love and blessings

      Rend


  • Cannonsfire
    October 16
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    This is one of your best sensual pieces I think, it is softly so and this speaks so much to the sensuality. I liked it a lot C


  • zappa gold member
    October 16

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    It feels like a dying man's last meal and a lovers dream come true!
    I can give you my honest opinion or lie to you but I will give it to you straight. Reminds me of a movie that one craves all the way up to the end when we scream "Is that the end?"
    Great choice in words and beautiful metaphors. The desire is there in truck Loads!!!!!

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