Shaky faith,
why do you decieve me,
recieve me..
See me for who I am.
Temptations real,
in a world so fake.
For God's sake...
See me for who I am.
Death's on the line,
speaking in busted volume,
Lord, alive..
Forgive me for who I've been.
Author notes
Oh God ! i am weak , but trying my hard to stay connected...Unknown. This quote is a prompt.
A contest entry
- to stay connected... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended October 31, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think...
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Goes well with the prompt.
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It almost feels like a run on of the prompt to me lol
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yeppers
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I think this is a gold
and is as we all feel
I love
for God sake...
and Lord alive...
they bring emotions perfectly into your precious poem
God bless you my friend...
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Thank you 
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Humm..to the point..and to the targeted very sharply my friend..love it..thank you so much fo the work you sent..well done...dear friend...
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Wow, I can really relate to this. I don't know if this is your actual feelings or just if it is a reaction to the prompt, but I think you caught the universal struggle between faith and doubt quite well. Sorry it took me this long to return your comment. Nice job.
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Hey - thanks for commenting This is in response to a prompt :
"Oh God ! i am weak , but trying my hard to stay connected...Unknown."
--But often, even if there is a prompt, I use my true feelings
Thanks! Amber
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very elegant poetry
I liked your words very much...the way you have weaved this one is simply masterly...
All the best wishes....
May God bless you...
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good poem
It is true to life to be yourself is the focus of this poem, what you are and who you are is important, being who you are doesn’t need to have approved faith in who you are , I get the feeling here of past depressions. Faith is the person who you are and the rest does not mater, There is a part were you have said forgive for who I have been? In some cases the need is to forgive yourself that sounds more realistic in the poem. Hope that shine some light within your life . Live life the way you want to live it , you have a free will to do. I think this poem has more to add . thank you.
©frank2009
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I like the flow of this, it really helps the words stay smooth. Don't we all need to be forgiven for people we were? God already knows you are truly sorry, when you have become the person you are now. Excellent write and good luck!
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