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Winter Grave

She begged me to stay,
but pride seduced me into
running away.

I couldn't face her pity
smiles nor her looking
glass' seeing  into my empty soul.

Confuse she maybe , but I
found love in dark cramped
spaces, trying to forget her
face.

From dusk to dawn I played
fast and loose. Giving only parts of me
while leaving behind pieces of her.
So I slept for days to forget the nights,
while rushing the nights to erase the
days.

Soon night become months with not a word,
just misplace dates filled with faceless playmates.
That feed on my lifeless soul so consumed in pain
I can't comprehend the cold. I no longer register
my face posted on buildboards, that read we love
and miss you please come home.

slowly slipping into the dark I remember

her face  age with worry, salt and pepper

hair, and her smile how bright it seem

in this dream , pulling me in her arms.

 

I feel her tears on my lips wishing new life.

Like central park ,early october...

behind the bushes. upon the icy ground,

looked over as I begin to still. 

Or early march in late afternoon

where my body lay covered in

snow along with the dead vines.

 

 

 

 

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  • penman gold member
    November 9
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    Powerful

    A very profound and intense write. So well expressed. Thank you for sharing


  • MoreTears2Fall
    October 20

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    This is very deep, and very well written. It's a really good poem and I liked it a lot. Great Poem!


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    October 16

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    This would be so very much better if you corrected your spelling errors
    It has powerful thought put into it but the overall effect of the piece is a bit lost due to the spelling errors (yes, I am a Nazi for correct spelling; sorry!)

    I thank you for sharing this piece and for being part of the contest! As I said, great thought put into the piece