Hey sweetie, where are you?
coming home soon?
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Of course you are not.
I do not expect you to...
Think of me. why would you do that?
You have a meeting. Don't you?
Or is it a party?
Away enjoying while your wife,
Sits here, rotting away at home.
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Oh are you busy?
I am so sorry for 'Disturbing' you.
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Then its a meeting this time again.
Why don't you just tell me where are you?
Which club? which restaurant? who's party? is it this time?
Whatever you do...
Darlin' I'll always be here in this prison,
This prison of a home you have made for me.
Where will I go?
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Yeah I am missing you so much.
You know, I always do
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After all I have done for you...
You cannot stay at home with me.
Run off with those friends of yours.
Go on, Have fun.
You can leave me alone, I can not.
I'll bug you. And you'll be mine:
Each second.
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There's a reason for everything I say to you.
Find it... It is your puzzle of the day.
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You can leave me alone, I will not.
I'll make you think about me,
I'll check your Mails, and tap you Phone.
I'll monitor you night and day.
Hey, hey you think I am sweet?
I won't keep an eye on you, I won't know how to?
Go on believing that. You'll wish it were true.
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Will you be home for dinner dear?
Oh you will be? that's so exciting.
you won't understand, why.
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I know, you haven't done anything yet.
You still are in the office,
The video shows that still.
But one day you will break my Trust.
And I'll nail you down then.
You go on believing that I am sweet
I'll keep my eyes open.
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Darling I'm missing you.
Please come home soon
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When you actually break my heart;
Ah! I already have my head start.
My eyes are on all you do.
When you'll try to shut me out.
I'll kill my way through.
Till then... Go on.
Have fun.
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Bye
Complete your work soon.
Author notes
This happened!
I read it in a newspaper. The wife was disillusioned that her husband was keeping her out of his life. And gradually she convinced herself that he was cheating on her, things turned violent. Though they are both alive now, she is in the mental ward.
I also had some examples where the husband was the jealous spouse. So it can happen to anyone.
Keep your eyes open and keep away from psycho cases.
This is dedicated to all the people out there fighting with problems like this or similar to this.
-Aalta
The lines between the
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marks are her conversation with her husband
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the other lines are her own twisted thoughts.
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hah whoa!
definately powerful and i could picture it, that would be a bit frightening to get that bad.. just to even, wow. thats all i'll say haha.
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this is very powerful,,, powerful indeed
an enjoyable real,,, love the thoughts and the form,,, even the shape the words took looked awesome,,, the thoughts conveyed brought emotions to me that really seemed to touch me,,, thanks sooooo much for sharing
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niiiice...
women are just as jealous and can be just as violent as men. i'm a woman. i should know.
brilliantly written, i love the jumps of what she says and what she thinks, but maybe it should be just that little bit clearer. -
"Away enjoying while you wife," IN this line I think YOU should of been YOUR
This was a very well written poem. I really enjoyed the read. Thank you for sharing this and thank you for entering. -
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OMG! i did not notice the mistake... thank you for pointing it out and thank you for the lovely comment
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wow..that was so cool.i havent ever read something liek that. that was amazing!
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This is quite scary actually, I had a GF once like this, it hits a little too close to home in fact. she stalked me for months after I finally had walked away from her jealousy and obsession. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you in the contest... Scott
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I Loved this.. at first I thought it was from an angry wife who was being left out.. but when it got to the part where you were watching him at work, and he wasn't doing anything... I started catching on.. It was very creative. Good job ;-)
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Enjoyed it!
Dear, I enjoyed reading this poem, it happens I too know many suspicious people ruining their life, also liked the new form of coversation orieted poem, to your surprise I too have written some pieces like this but without marks -
Once lost, trust can't be easily renewed. But, it is definitely what relationships should be based upon. Unfortunately, there are many real life examples of this poem and some end in a pretty nasty way.
Well done!
Nela
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Wow. It's sad that things like this actually happen
great job on the poem. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
-Steve-
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Wow this is sooo good so true to life and i like the added bits as well i couldnt tell which were yours lol very good write poet i really enjoyed it xxx
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excellent
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Very Good
Other than a few mis used words this is a very good poem, full of raw emotion and dedication to completing a task either real or suspected, to a deranged mind either is real.
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wow... this had my heart racing, I loved it! I can see the gradual degredation of her sanity... and I could feel it with each passing line. It's like I WAS her, as her dillusions began to twist and distort her reality. This was just creepy, and I love the dark and creepy
There were a couple of places that may have been typos, or perhaps I just don't understand the words... 4th 'stanza', line 6 'This of a house...' I think there is supposed to be something else there, perhaps...
7th stanza, 3rd line : I'll check your mails, and tap you phone. Should that be I'll check your MAIL, and tap YOUR phone ?
9th stanza, line 5 : And I'll nail you don then. don? Is that supposed to be something else? or do you mean don him... as in wear him?
Overall, I think this piece is fantastic!!! I just want to understand those few areas. Absolutely great write! -
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Oh! thanks for pointing them out... I was in a hurry so I could not recheck my mistakes... all printing mistakes...sorry!
Thank you so much for taking the time to visit and read the poem.... Thank you for the comment
-Aalta
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this was really good. i've heard alot of stories about people like that and i really liked the spin you put on it
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