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you don't know me

you don't know me
not really
tonight I want to let this go
i need to
please

you don't know me
how close i was to blowing it tonight
i wanted to
scream
but not kill
never kill
but i wanted you to feel
feel pain
something to jar you back to reality

God i know this is wrong
wrong for me to feel this way
don't let me feel this way

don't let me kill
kill with my thoughts help me
to smile

cause you don't know me
not really
and if you did
you wouldn't treat me this way

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Option # 32

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  • Avalanche.
    October 15
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    this is a great poetic write. Very ....repetitive very good though. good luck in my contest!