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It's Her

 

I'm sorry to hurt you,
to make you worry
but she hurts me too,
and I'd like to bury
all these feelings inside of me,
slowly killing from inside out
wishing I'd finally be free,
I already know without a doubt
it's all wrong, but can't you see,
how I need her, inside of me.

Suicide just sounds,

too seductive to resist

they're my battlegrounds,

but my soul won't be missed

I cannot express myself,

in any other way

it's not 'bout my mental health,

it's the price I have to pay

it's all wrong, but can't you see

how I need her, inside of me

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  • denise20
    October 27

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    wow

    this is one of the best poems i've read in a while,the whole poem just blew me away. I can relate to it in so many way's that it's almost creepy haha.
    Hope you'll gett better soon and that you never stop writing!
    looking forward reading more of your poems.

    x

    denise

  • edgy
    October 21
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    Thank you so much for your comments, it means so much to me to see that other people can relate to what I'm writing!


  • xtragicanax
    October 20
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    thank you so much for writing this.
    you are not alone.i feel the same.
    please keep writing.


  • starving4perfection
    October 20

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    wow! that was amazing!
    "it's all wrong, but can't you see
    how I need her, inside of me" i understand those lines so well
    beautiful poem! keep up the good work! x


  • dukeshorts
    October 18
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    excellent. no critisim its great!


  • Let.Love.In
    October 16

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    Great poem and wonderful use of ryhme

    my favorite lines where:
    I already know without a doubt
    it's all wrong, but can't you see,
    how I need her, inside of me.

    if you want to add to your poem I suggest that you should talk more about her. you need her but I as a reader don't really know her.

    great write though

    ~Torii

  • peacebrat
    October 15
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    I liked the peom nice job

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