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Maggie And Prometheus Bound (Fiction, 640 words)

 


This is a work of fiction and is in no way meant to accurately portray any person or persons living or dead.



Maggie sat at her Smith-Corona, a pencil snugly wedged between the side of her head and right ear. She looked closely at the word, “Habitation” that she had typed 15 minutes before. It was the title of a poem she had felt compelled to write, but once she'd set down to actually compose it, nothing had come into her head.

Suddenly, thinking of the past, Maggie uttered a low, "Ah ha!" and began to feverishly type,

Marriage is not
a house or even a tent

it is before that, and colder:

She paused for a moment, then half-turned in her chair so that she could see out of the corner of her eye, her life partner Graeme who was sitting on the living room sofa reading the evening paper. "Graeme?" she spoke excitedly, "I've found it!"

Graeme looked up from the sports page where he was reading an article about former hockey star Bobby Hull and asked absently, "What's that dear? Found it? Found what? The television remote? That's good dear."

Maggie's expression changed from wide eyed excitement to a squinting perturbed look. "You aren't listening to me again Graeme! Get your head out of the hockey schedule and listen to me! I've found it, the beginning of my poem!"

Graeme, who had finished reading the Hull article was indeed eyeing the schedule to see who his beloved Toronto Maple Leafs were playing that night. Without looking up he tried to feign interest and replied, "That's good dear. I knew you could do it!"

Displeased with his lack of interest, she uttered a loud, "Uggghhh!" and turned back to her typewriter, filled with ammunition.

the edge of the forest, the edge
of the desert
the unpainted stairs
at the back where we squat
outside, eating popcorn

the edge of the receding glacier

She stopped, blew on her hands and muttered, "It's cold in here." Graeme, nodded but did not move his eyes away from the paper, "Cold? I set the thermostat to 25."

Maggie gave another "Uggghhh" and grumbled under her breath, "That's not what I meant you stupid neanderthal." Having uttered those words, Maggie shouted, "Ah!" and began typing,

where painfully and with wonder
at having survived even
this far

we are learning to make fire

She quickly grabbed at the sheet of paper and yanked it from the typewriter's carriage. Jumping up from her chair, she brought the poem over to Graeme and proudly declared, “I've finished the poem. Here, have a look."

Graeme sighed, put down his paper, took the crumpled sheet and read the first few lines before pronouncing, "It's another poem about your ex-husband Jim, I take it."

"What makes you think that?" Maggie challenged, growing red in the face. Graeme did not answer for he had gone on reading the poem. He finished and looked at Maggie who was standing before him, waiting, "Well? she asked.

"It's good Maggie...umm, yes, very good."
"Is that all it is, good?
"No, it's quite good, it's just..." his voice trailing off.
"It's just what?" she asked in a grave tone that he knew well enough to obey.
"Well, it's just, how could they be outside eating popcorn if they had yet to learn how to make fire?"

Maggie stood stiff, her face growing pale, but after a moment, she recovered enough to claim her anger. "You don't know anything about poetry!" she shouted and stormed off to the kitchen where she stared abjectly at the tray of ice cubes in the freezer compartment of the refrigerator. She should have known better than to unchain Prometheus from the mountain. She hated when he was right, that he didn't understand the rules of cohabitation. She wished he would just keep quiet and let her make the fire.

Author notes

Option: The poem as a whole.

The poem quoted is Margaret Atwood's "Habitation"

The names are real, the event fake.

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  • wave1080
    2 hours ago
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    This is so simple and powerful , I like how you write about everyday life and make it so interesting I love this .


  • Mango Memories gold member
    1 day ago
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    ...


  • Melodies
    November 17
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    WHAT? Her husband tolerates her poetry? How lucky is SHE? VERY! lol on the cold metaphors. You wrote a story with a poem inside, so you get extra appreciation from me.


    • Yemassee gold member
      November 17
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      Ok, what's that guy at the bottom trying to reach?

      Penguin Slider

      • Melodies
        November 17
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        HUH??? We have a penguin emoticon? How do you make it? Kevin gave us a LOT of new ones, but still no fairy or teddy bear. We do have these, though:

        This one is eating popcorn:

        lol This one is dancing.


        • Yemassee gold member
          November 17
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          No, no penguin that I know of. It's a third party emoticon I tossed in for fun.

          more emoticon madness 2


          • Mango Memories gold member
            1 day ago
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            OH MY GOD.


            you are going to tell me how you made that emo thing!

          • Melodies
            November 17
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            OH! Oh, Great Yemassee, you know how to do BIG THINGS on your computer and I only know how to do little things.

            I can do this, though:


            • Yemassee gold member
              November 17
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              Big things! lol Yes, emoticons are really important things!

              <img src='/s/images/smile/grin.gif'>roneguards-side-job:

              • Melodies
                November 17
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                The fire on this page is keeping me warm, so I keep coming back. OH MY GOSH, I wish you could be my emoticon tutor. You have a treasure chest full of them!


  • JinSays gold member
    November 11
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    Maggie.

    Yes, just be quiet now and go away.
    I see me here. Don't worry-I dont consider it a bad thing.
    Just moving in the direction of learning to believe in what I write, and that it's not fluff or drivel, that people GET IT.
    I see the funny here too, always a good thing to keep around in case the ego inflates a bit too much.

    Reminds me of a story about my idol Dorothy Parker. Her ultimate failure to produce a novel, after the publisher had already paid her to write it... going to the trouble of living with the Murphy's in their expensive artist's retreat, bragging to everyone who'd listen about her success with the book itself...she impulsively drank a bottle of shoe-polish, and had to be hospitalized. She was all over the headlines, all over the gossip columns...more popular than ever.
    People called it another attempt at suicide. ..and she still had to pay back that money.

    Am I the only one who gets the irony beneath the tragedy?
    After committing most of her poetry to memory?

    Okay, so I don't have a straight segue into your poem because I lost it. Happens with the short term memory loss..
    dang it

    Sigh. Poor Graeme, he'd better get out while he has a chance
    I could read you all day.

    love,
    jin

    • Yemassee gold member
      November 11
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      Again, the host let me be insolent.

      Thank you, you are the only one that saw that Graeme wasn't terrible and wasn't all to blame. Most just tossed all the blame on to him. There is lots of room for blame in this tale. Hopefully humor too.

      Yes, the bits and pieces I know about you, I can see you in Margaret. I certainly see myself in Graeme.

      Thank you for the little glimpse into yourself and for the topic of Dorothy Parker. She was an intriguing lady.


  • pixiestix gold member
    October 24
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    Very creative take on the prompt giving the reader a view into what events might have been going on while "Maggie" was writing "Habitation" and how her frustration at her partner's behavior possibly inspired the verse.

    What I liked was how you set such a familiar home scenario which both men and women can relate to. Your characters are believable and thus you made them real.

    She doesn't get his obsession with sports and he doesn't get poetry...period. Neither can effectively fake interest or share in the excitement each discipline brings to them individually when engrossed in their respective passions.

    Nicely done and thanks for entering the contest.

    • Yemassee gold member
      October 24
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      "She doesn't get his obsession with sports and he doesn't get poetry...period. Neither can effectively fake interest or share in the excitement each discipline brings to them individually"

      You've caught it right there. No fire being built between them.

      I knew you were smart.

      Thanks Imogene.


      • pixiestix gold member
        October 24

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        Your welcome anonymized floating pumpkin head person.


        • Yemassee gold member
          October 24
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          Sad thing is, everyone tells me I'm anonymous whether I'm in a contest or not.


  • J aime Coudre silver member
    October 23

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    Sad, so very, very sad

    "Graeme"...Often spelled Brian...the name of a well loved son of mine who has gone through many wonderful relationships because of ...Yep! You guessed it "sports" ...He is in another one now so we are keeping our fingers crossed that the sports channels will be taken off the air...Ha! fat chance of that ever happening...but you really have discribed him to a tee...except for the team...he favors the Canucks...and the Cubs, and the Bears, and the Seahawks and the list goes on for ever...

    Wonderful but true shocking tale of horror...

    • Yemassee gold member
      October 24
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      Poor Brian. That you know his favorite teams says much about you as a mom. I actually turned my mom into a basketball fan. I haven't had the same luck with other women, lol thanks!


  • catz Moderators member
    October 23

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    Ahhh... so many attributes to address in this shocking tale of horror. And what woman wouldn't be horrified by a tale such as this. I could decipher referrance to each of my hubbies in this excellant piece of prose/poetry. Yem. Have you been following me around all these years??

    Hubby #1 was before the remote (except perhaps for the very afluent, which we were not) but he did happen to use the knobs quite well to watch... yep, sports. But he must not have learned to make fire because he always pestered me or one of the kiddies to turn up the thermostat. He was such a loser.

    #2 was often encouraging at my miserable attempts at whatever was my interest at any given time but still managed to keep an eye on the TV watching... yep, sports. He didn't need a fire becuse he just cuddled up with an aphgan and the cat to keep warm. He was a good man, though.

    #3 is still a keeper even if he does watch... yep, sports. He's a wonderful man, even though he never reads my poetry, which may be a good thing since he thinks of me as perfect in every way... reading my poetry would no doubt disillusion him. And some of them ARE about my ex-husbands.

    Quite a tale here and I wish you best in the contest

    Dee

    • Yemassee gold member
      October 23
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      Anyone who is in a relationship with me needs to hide the remote because I watch, yep, sports. I have always read their poetry though, but preferably their short stories.

      I have learned never to show the lady I am currently with the poems I wrote about my former girlfriends. That never ends well for me!

      Thanks!


  • bigperm gold member
    October 19

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    You have managed to belittle Pixie's prompt,

    insult a Canadian icon, and glorify the male stereotype in just a few paragraphs. You are my hero...pray-tell how you do it. I try to infuriate people with racy topics and self-righteous garbage, but they don't seem to get where I'm coming from so they dismiss me. You have the ability to say what's on your mind and get nothing but the utmost respect for your in-site. I am humbled to the notion of how much growing up I've left to endure.lol

    • Yemassee gold member
      October 19
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      I only made fun of three things? Wow, I'm slipping.

      What? People dismiss me too. That's what readers on AP are best at. There, that's four things now.

      Ah no one takes anyone serious here. I'm just some big harmless clown to them. Which I guess is a fair assessment.

      Thanks.


  • waydownuponjoy
    October 17

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    Progressive prose!

    Your mind, when set in motion, has a very unique way of sharing tales that hold my interest for your perceptiveness (which I've mentioned before many times) and of allowing yourself to see what others ignore and then to share those 'unsaid' observations in a way that make a reader go ... "a ha!" I feel that your talent for stories, when channeled, to the serious side of life, is an asset that you don't quite recognize and probably feel 'what's the use?'. This shocking tale of human horror is no exception and I could see you doing this with unfamous poets as well ... and this site offers you much potential for not flittering away that talent. Write Yem! and post so we can see your tongue-in-cheek humor that goes beyond the boring and touches on the true reality of life! A good story here! joy


    • Yemassee gold member
      October 17
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      wouldn't make, not would, darn bad typing skills, lol

    • Yemassee gold member
      October 17
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      Ok, that's quite possibly the nicest thing anyone has written (or said) about my writing. Thank you. As you know, because I'm sure you are the same way with poetry, it's just fun to write, to explore our silly noggins and make believe we can understand others too. If it wouldn't make others jealous I'd post your comment on my author page.

      What? You don't like my clown and monkey stories/poems?

      Thanks.


  • UncleDunk gold member
    October 16

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    That was very well written. I felt like I had picked up a book and read a random page. Reminded me in style of Michael Bishop. I felt her frustration - neither my wife or daughter like any poetry that rhymes! But the real question for me is...

    Who are the Red Wings playing?


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    October 16

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    Priorities---finding the TV remote
    over words on the page. Actually,
    only one remote, lots of words...

    Great atmosphere, Fictioneer,
    his side/her side. You bring
    in again the variances of
    what is important to each
    person. Not as happy as the
    "she" sitting down on the floor
    with the "he" to sort the books!

    Quite haunting, the concept of asking
    while knowing the answer would not
    be what she wanted to hear.

    Fire up the stove for the popcorn...

    • Yemassee gold member
      October 16
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      I don't think they'll ever get around to building that fire. They'd better buy ready popped popcorn.

      Yep, the contrast in relationships, also on expectations. One couple has learned how to make the fire, the other still sits on the glacier.

      Thanks

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    October 15

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    A few suggestions first...maybe eying/eyeing, fain/feign, maybe stood stiff/stiffly? As ever, feel free to fold them into paper areoplanes and fly them towards the wastepaper basket for recycling...


    You know how to set a scene well, the reader becomes absorbed, enveloped, within the interaction between the two characters and the interspersing of Attwood's poetry acts as a staircase which they both traipse, though only one is aware of it.


    It's interesting that the word marriage isn't employed, with good reason as the couple are cohabiting as life-partners without having had a ceremony to cement their intent. By highlighting this the writer shows that regardless of this when a couple cohabit they both still retain their individual needs whilst needing to both feel satisfied re their partners needs, even, as this reveals, one of them does not understand why the other isn't feeling fulfilled.


    Ah, the fire, the flames, the passion, they were all there, her's fanned by creativity via poetry and his via kindled by Hockey, but there was a yawning chasm within their shared habitat which allowed frostiness to crystalize, made me ponder how we learn to feel the other person's enthusiasm and if it is kinder to fake it and imbue a microscoregasm or to feel and deal without wounding so that neither one nor both are left with cold comfort.




    • Yemassee gold member
      October 16
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      Thank you for the corrections. Fain is an embarrassing typo.

      They weren't married because to my faulty knowledge Margaret Atwood and Graeme Gibsonweren't/aren't married. And while this is just silly fiction I kept their names, including that of the ex-husband.

      I've read a lot of poetry that seemed a little overly-dramatic and found that to be Margaret's "Habitation" and so I decided to play with her motivation in a hopefully humorous way.

      Thanks for reading it.


  • Mari Goes gold member
    October 15

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    You and the flames
    I liked the story and the meaning behind (the one I got of it anyway).
    You have made fire in different stories, you aren't learning, you are the combustion expert

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