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Thread of Dreams

 

 

Sunrays in a basket I place for you, dearest,
my heart sends them packet with missings.


      The rays of the sun are dearly received,
      I return this warmth with tender kissings.


Your kisses are treasured in velvet boxes,
kept for times when loneliness seeps.


      Loneliness comes, loneliness goes,
      but love remains yours solely to keep.


And keep it, I shall inside my soul,
folded within the layers of dreams.


      An endless dance in hearts and minds,
      where all our wishes are as they seem.


Tango or Jazz, our feet, with rhythm,
will hit the floor as life's tunes play.


      We dance not for tonight but dance for life,
      and to this melody we will always sway.


In your arms I'll find that eternal trance,
the one I crave, the one I seek.


      The warmth in your heart shall be renewed,
      the life we yearn shall never be bleak.


By the name of love, we'll swear an oath,
to never bow before waves of seas.


      A promise made is a promise to keep,
      let our pinkies interlock, just you and me.

I believe the words, those your lips speak,
and in your hands I place my heart.


      When hearts are entwined, this is love.
      let us be as one never to part.


Parting is what our souls shall not witness
for in life or death, in love, we're bound.


      A filling life with a love-filled ending,
      is something that we've truly found.


Found who we wished for

                                      our angels

 

 

 

(C)Noor & Ken 10/15/2009 

Author notes

A Collaboration...

My lines: Purple

ken's lines: Blue

 

Picture credit: Dragon and Phoenix by ~Rattlesnakedefender

 

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  • glenn shannon silver member
    October 17

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    loved this collab nice rhym and sweet as apricot pie well done both writers enjoyed it a lot

  • what a lovely piece! i really enjoyed it..you both are very talented.


  • horus8 gold member
    October 15
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    It seemed every stanza repeated the same message.


  • bellagio girl
    October 15
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    Sorry, I forgot these last time.....

  • bellagio girl
    October 15

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    I loved this, it was really touching and beautiful. It was so well written, it didn't seem like a collaboration. A very enjoyable love poem.
    Thank you for sharing.


  • Miserable girl
    October 15
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    wow thats good


  • Raining Kisses silver member
    October 15

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    this is beautiful..crafted like hand woven lace...layer upon layer of utter beauty
    T


  • Eric Marsh
    October 15

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    what a lovely poem....it looks visually quite beautiful and the content...oh it sings...two lives and loves intertwined forever as one in one...wonderful..


  • Ken-Maverick
    October 15
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    Shaweetness...

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