He didn’t see it coming. Not one bit.
Especially since she’s who called it off.
Running back to him? Nope. Didn’t see it.
But there she was in fits of tears and coughs
reliving their days with: ‘Remember when…’
O, she almost had him. He almost fell.
Keen words, keen timing all but did him in;
even after recalling days of hell.
Now, here’s the kicker; here’s what kept him sane:
He found inner strength in being alone.
Eventually, she will find the same.
As for now, she misses when he was ‘home’,
remembering still how she played her part.
The words she whispers to her broken heart.
Author notes
Acrostic Sonnet inspired by this contest:
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2463031
Eh... Trying to finish up some of what was started last week. Not much time though. Still writing Pascal's tale too.
Oh well, It is what it is...
Dez
Ehhh.... Whatever....
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I can feel pain in it, very real pain. I like it.
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sad but so beautiful penned it doesn't really matter great jo
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OOPS!
my badd
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this is fine just the way it is. very sad deep words spoken here.
i like your style keep penning -
For me the best acrostics are not simply a list of words that happen to kowtow to the acrostic presentation and you deftly avoided a list by adding poetic turns of phrase and emotional grist.
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I love it dez!!!!!!!!! I can relate to this a bit...
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Fantastic, Dez! Accessible, conversational language and great form qualities, that's hard to do.
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You still got the touch Dez, if I hadn't thought you just didn't like my behind no more I wouldn't have ever stopped reading *winkness*. It's the hot ah nessss monstah.
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First class
I love the fact that you've written this in everyday vernacular language and still managed to make it poetic - this has the ring of emotional authenticity, Dez, and is also an excellent acrostic sonnet.
Good one,
Bill
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damn dude..
this is outstanding, sad and very touching piece of work..it don't seem to me like you you need add anymore to it..it's amazing like it is..
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