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expressways


body closes bedsheets
macarthur parkway muses
tar prints on rubber sole
and the night comes to life
in every sigh you make

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  • heaven all alone
    October 20

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    i actually have to disagree with jan in that i think the and makes the ending flow perfectly. this has such a distinct feeling encrypted within it.


    • Envelope
      October 20
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      yea she likes to pick on me =P thanks a lot, I havent gotten around to reading you much or anyone for that matter, Need to get on that

  • jantastic gold member
    October 15

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    Shorter than you usually write. This is succinct and contains a lot in a few lines. You could likely get away with taking out the and, but sometimes I go overboard with culling words. I like this.