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As The Moon Loves the Sun

What if I could trust you
With everything I've done
Would you still love me
As the Moon loves the Sun

But if you knew everything
Would you squirm with disgust
Would you plan my demise
With cold hateful lust

Would you weep at my faults
Could you look at me and say
"I don't understand!
And someday you'll pay!"

If the Sun had a secret
Would he fear the Moon
Would the Moon say to Sun
"You shall hang at high noon!"

Would the Sun even know
The Moon had secrets too
That the Moon feared the Sun
As to what HE might do

But the Sun and the Moon
They share more than we know
For over the years both have
Withstood many similar a blow

And still they love one another
unbiased and unjudged
Knowing both their faces
Are tainted and smudged

So would you still love me
As the Moon loves the Sun
Perhaps you understand
The hidden things I've done

If so, stay with me
My friend I need you
Perhaps you'll need me
To help you feel anew

Than let us promise
That what's done is done
But we'll love each other
As the Moon loves the Sun

Author notes

I learned tonight.....how refreshing it is to learn that, I'm not the only one

Thats all I'm gonna say about my inspiration for this poem. I hope though that you like it and can connect with it in some way. Knowing that you're not the only one going through shit and awkward crap in your life is so relieving, and that's the point that I wanted to get across in this piece. Even though bad stuff has happened and been done in your life, you always need someone there to say "I love you no matter what" and mean it. It really does make all the difference

And yes for those of you who are gonna ask, I realize that "Unjudged" is not a word. But it worked with the...hopeful flow and the rhyme scheme in that stanza.

So yeah, enjoy. I truly loved writing this one and I'm very proud of it

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  • darkscorpia
    November 26
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    I loved the imagery and metaphor in this poem. You have a reason to be proud of this.
    "So would you still love me
    As the Moon loves the Sun"
    I love this refrain and you did a good job with the casual rhyming.
    -Claire