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And I watch the raindrops through torrents of sunlight...


I watch the rain
Fall down
Silver droplets
Upon the ground

And through the air
Streamers fly
Breeze slowly fading
And sunlight die

Black blanket
Soon shall come
Starlets shine
Maybe catch some

Rainpour halting
At midsummers rim
Midnight hours
Late moonlight dim

The dawn aglow
Bright rose bouquet
Welcome out
Another day

Noontime quivers
Breezes leap
Whispr'ing raindrops
Fast asleep

Author notes

Sister? I'm looking for brothers/a lover. It doesn't really matter. I've gathered quite a big collection of brothers already though. Uncle, grandfather, cousin are all open, but I don't believe you'd want any of them. thanks

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  • Antebellum
    November 13
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    oh wonderful rhyme.
    ...
    Rainpour halting
    At midsummers rim
    Midnight hours
    Late moonlight dim
    ...
    this is amazing. thanks so much for entering.


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    October 26

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    This was very well written! I enjoyed reading this. It had a good flow too it as well. thank you for entering and best of luck too you in the contest.


  • MJ Forgives
    October 25

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    Cool poem. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
    -Jess


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 24

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    This was interesting to say the least. It didn't really keep my attenton. It wasn't bad or anything so don't get me wrong there. THanks for entering and best of luck.


  • RainShatteredDreams
    October 23

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    good, job


    I watch the rain
    Fall down
    Silver droplets
    Upon the ground

    And through the air
    Streamers fly
    Breeze slowly fading
    And sunlight die

    Black blanket
    Soon shall come
    Starlets shine
    Maybe catch some

    beautiful detail, good luck in the contest!

    -Mary-

  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    October 17
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    This is a very good piece. I enjoyed reading this. However I am not for sure what you want too be as a part of my family. So let me know. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest.

  • Haret5
    October 17

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    Nice Poem

    Your poem about the summer and a rain stom is very nice. I see you went a bit for fluency and rhyme though neither one is complete but it is a nice abstact to other poems. Keep up the good work.


  • myusikah
    October 15

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    Wow. You write really maturely for an 11 year old. It's beautiful, and it reminds me of one of those hectic adults who take a moment and sit at a windowsil, watching the little raindrops cascade down the window, and wonder what they're missing out on. Oh, and I just realized that there was a rhyme scheme, which makes it not obvious, which means it's a good rhyme.

    Sometimes it seems like there isn't much meaning in your erratic words but the meaning in all in the surrounding lines, and I like that very much about your poetry.

    And...I am jealous of your vocabulary. Honestly. I can't write poems and go in depth when I use non-repetitive words...mostly because I don't know enough words.


    Anyway, I like what you've done here.

    -->pia♫♪


  • C J Weatherholt
    October 14

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    Another wonderful write my dear and how about I be your Aunt? Thanks for entering again! I'll check out that contest and see what I can do.

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