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Hypocritic "friend"

A hypocrisy has been ordered for this friendship
Who will we betray this time?
Who can we fill with greed again?
Just rip their heart out and shove a pump in
They won't feel the pain, until the gas begins
Flowing secretly through their veins
They won't know it's there till it hits their face
Washing over their whole body, into the mind
How much will they believe in this hypnotic lie?


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  • AngelicDreams
    October 20, 2009

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    This is interesting. Sometimes our friends can be our worst enemy.

    Thank you for sharing your talent
    Best of luck in the contest