Mistress Melissa
had a new game
for her pets to play today.
She took them
to her large spacious room,
and said:
“Mark, you’re a dog,
Lisa, you’re a cat.
If it is to my liking,
both of you shall be graciously
rewarded!”
Their eyes sparkled
with their desire to please.
Mistress Melissa
seated herself on a large chair
to watch the play.
Lisa got some red pillows
and lay them on the carpet,
Mark sat in the far corner of the room,
and waited.
She lied down on her side
and started to meow softly,
Mark moved slowly towards her.
At his approach,
she started to meow-moan
and rub her back seductively
against his muscular arms.
He bent over and licked her back;
tasting it. He liked it.
He ran his tongue down her round ass
And up again.
She meow-moaned louder.
He barked his delight.
His eyes grazed her naked body;
he barked with excitement.
She nibbled at his nipple.
His cock was getting hard.
He licked her whole face
with his big flat tongue.
She lied down on her back,
looking playfully alluring to him.
He barked again,
and approached, licking her legs,
going up her thighs
with large loud licks
till he reached her pussy.
There, he sniffed around
then start to lick hungrily.
Lisa’s cat-moans pierced the silence.
Getting wet, she slid beneath her companion,
who entered her wet field of pink delight,
loud cat and dog moans flooded the room.
When both had ejected,
Mark licked their combined juice
And barked once more.
The Mistress clapped her hands,
and when they turned, she was undressed.
She opened her legs for them,
and they saw their reward.
Hungrily, they started to lick her pussy.
Author notes
The title is a pun, I used different meanings of "play".
For the judges and anyone who reads this, my punctuation is very carefully chosen. If you have question you may ask, but don't tell me, my punctuation is bad, coz - plainly and not very nicely - you're at fault. For the judges, I would like you to read slowly and make a short stop when the line ends NOT when you see a full-stop only.
Having said that, you can reread the poem after you've read this note.
I hope this is good for the theme of the challenge. Enjoy!
A contest entry
- Season 10 (Round 3) by Master Ktulu.
450 points, ended October 28, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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A lovely sensual write. As for your note I pay little attention to punctuation when judging as it is poetic license in my mind, I leave that to MK. You are quite correct to say line breaks are a pause unless one is using enjambments - which I think you could do incredibly well. You made a good use of the prompt and developed the theme strongly throughout.
Well done
Score 94/100
Corvus Corone
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I would like to say that I agree with my co-judge about your note. I do know that in the past, we have had our critiques about punctuation, however, where it was spotty in the past, it was "SPOT ON" this time.
spelling/grammar/puntuation- 19
As was already pointed out, by shimmer, the word "and" should not be capitalized.
presentation and creativity- 20
how well you handled the challenge=20
I think you really handled your challenge perfectly.
grab me=20
overall=19
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Total- 98
**Master Ktulu** -
First I would like to comment on your note. When I read this the first time I didn't notice the lack of punctuation in some of the lines. It all read smoothly for me the first time around. I went back and reread and saw what you were talking about and just want to say for me that it made sense the way you have written it. If one of our critques from another round was about your lack of punctuation then I can only guess it was because it was inconsistent and didn't follow any clear pattern or order, at least for me while I was reading it.
Now for the poem itself. I have to admit I don't know much about pet play, just a general concept and this must have been hard to write. I applaud you for handling it so well. I don't know if I could have.
spelling/grammar=19
second to last paragraph, last line *and* should be lowered case.
presentation=20
how well you handled the challenge=20
grab me=18
overall=18
total=95
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Now, that is a choice take on the word.... PLAY..
I think you did an outstanding job. I only read it once,
but I like to read every thing slow
one line at a time.
Best of luck to you with this.
Riftkin
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wow, this was fun!! Very creative use of the prompt. You did a great job!! Lots of vivid erotic imagery!!! best of luck!!!
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The Mistress clapped her hands
and when they turned, she was undressed
She opened her legs for them
and they saw their reward
Hugrily, they started to lick her pussy.
The best kind of reward. I might ask my gf to avail the next opportunity. Are you the Mistress?
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yekhreb betek again eh dah twisted mind indeed but i love it
great work
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Crazy!
I'm not sure that is the right word, but it will do for now, yup, a crazy round, and this one is nice for pet play! good luck in the contest!
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I do agree with Suzanne, this is proving to be to be a very fun round! What a wild take on your prompt! I like how you leave the reader hangin a bit with that last line. Well done!!
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This round is CRAZY!!!
I think this is a very worthy and hot enrty, great job on the prompt, which was difficult. I did notice a typo in line 51, she "slid"? Much luck ot you in the contest
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