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I am canned tomatoes...

probably of the worst variety,

my sun-ripened days,

ended with no cherries,

and i didn't hit the jackpot,

nor did i make it big.

 

nope,

i ended up squished into

labels of diced, strained, paste and puree

until the world made sauce out of me.

 

sauce, sass...what the hell's the difference?

 

at least now i have vacuum package metal

to encase my shelf life, just a bit longer

and i no longer freeze well,

but smell funny in the heat.

 

i mix okay with vodka,

but the shit tastes like water to me now,

so i avoid its pungency.

 

i write for the late night burger trips,

and those little moments,

when ashtrays become full

and the world feels but a hum,

that annoying ringing in the ears...

 

when i can smother cheddar over melted hopes,

and fatten the wallet of a starving mind.

 

i can borrow from myself,

the forgetfulness of sleeplessness,

and splurge my daring venture

into ketchup bottle's ditties,

and my Heinz 57 heritage

Author notes

I got sick of bologna sandwiches as a kid, but at least I was
somewhat fed, and I felt horrible for those couldn't eat. So
sometimes, I would peel pieces of those sandwiches, and
ask the birds to bring them to the hungry kids of the world.

Damn greedy birds ate those pieces for themselves.

-spoot! Don't ask.

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  • grampabob1946 silver member
    October 15
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    You have a way with words, my dear!

    Okay, so now, what can you write about prunes.


    • Hetha gold member
      October 16
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      "prunes,prunes,
      good for the fart,
      the more you eat them,
      the more you ___"

      the more you ____
      the better you feel,
      so eat your prunes at
      every meal"

      Okay, so I changed that from beans, but...

      ~Hettie


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    October 15
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    Congrats on a well deserved Silver!

  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    October 14

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    This is a truly cool poem. I love the tomato metaphor. This feels so real, yet poetic, too.

    Fried Bologna? How about thick slabs of bologna with Velveta cheese. Super ugh. What I would not do back then for thin sliced bologna.


    • Hetha gold member
      October 15
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      Super ugh? Government issue bologna -yuck! Government issue peanut butter is just as bad.


  • grampabob1946 silver member
    October 14
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    Oh, what a mind you have!

    This is very nice!!!

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    October 14
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  • Griswold silver member
    October 14

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    Oh Hettie you make me smile, this is a masterpiece from start to finish, "smell funny in the heat" Is it the gear oil or just sweat? You know I ate bologna sandwiches almost every damn day as a kid in my lunch, makes me sick to think of it, I wont touch one now. Give me Salami!!! Your imagery is astounding as usual. Thank you so much for entering and best of luck... Scott

    • Hetha gold member
      October 15
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      I ate bologna sandwiches every day too, and I got burned out on them pretty fast as a kid. Salami's okay, but without the damn peppercorns. Glad you enjoyed it.

      ~Hettie


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    October 14

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    L11 - "vacuum" - check the spelling, it may just be my british eyes

    "shit" love it

    "when i can smother cheddar over melted hopes,
    and fatten the wallet of a starving mind." - that is yours & yours alone.

    lol. love the reference to Heinz 57 (varieties) (Beanz meanz Heinz).

    the last line is unnecessary...the preceding line is impactful and the perfect finish for this piece.


    right critiquer, wrong poem - i'm warming up.


    love you sis, do well in the contest.

    me xxx

    • Hetha gold member
      October 14
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      Thanks, very much..and I checked the spelling, it's correct... but i checked it again just in case. stripped the last line...good to go, i think. hopefully the judge will enjoy it too.

      Love you too, Sis bunches...
      ~Hettie

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