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Awake,yet still dreaming

Awake,yet still dreaming
Awaiting a new season
Awaiting a Love to treasure

Counting on time
To provide a sweeter home

A mind once wide awake drifting slowly back to coma
Once again dreaming

In this what is to come.....

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  • The-punk-princess
    October 17

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    I really like this
    "A mind once wide awake drifting slowly back to coma
    Once again dreaming"
    Interesting concept, I like it
    You did VERY well on this.
    Thank you so much for sharing!


  • Melee Vau gold member
    October 16

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    great concept - wakeful dreaming, then returning to coma, still waiting for something good like love to come along. almost like sleeping beauty.

    I enjoyed the read! my fav lines:
    "A mind once wide awake drifting slowly back to coma
    Once again dreaming

    In this what is to come....."

    (boring bit - there is a space missing after the comma in the poem title; and did you mean In or If in the final line? I think either works, just wondering....)


  • shukriabdalla
    October 14
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    LOVE!
    simple and pleasant
    LOVE IT<3