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Hearts' Uncertainty



Wander in mindless direction,
naïve hearts' miscalculation;
roses give probability,
leaving us in uncertainty.   

Intuition follows heartstrings,
peculiar, impractical things,
which never love reality,
leaving us in uncertainty. 

Take back heartless apologies,
mind games of ideologies,
seldom play practicality,
leaving us in uncertainty.

We are blinded by illusion,
tip-toe around in confusion;
heartbreaks bring insecurity,
leaving us in uncertainty.

Wander in mindless direction,
leaving us in uncertainty.




Author notes

Prompt:

"The imagination is a tool of betrayal..."
by Nienna Calmcacil "Seventh Flame" in http://allpoetry.com/poem/5601201


A Kyrielle Sonnet consists of 14 lines (three rhyming quatrain stanzas and a non-rhyming couplet). Just like the traditional Kyrielle poem, the Kyrielle Sonnet also has a repeating line or phrase as a refrain (usually appearing as the last line of each stanza). Each line within the Kyrielle Sonnet consists of only eight syllables. French poetry forms have a tendency to link back to the beginning of the poem, so common practice is to use the first and last line of the first quatrain as the ending couplet. This would also re-enforce the refrain within the poem. Therefore, a good rhyming scheme for a Kyrielle Sonnet would be:

AabB, ccbB, ddbB, AB -or- AbaB, cbcB, dbdB, AB.

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Comments

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  • Tqop
    November 11
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    Congrats on the bronze. You did a good job.


  • Draig aine gold member
    October 20
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    stunning as always


  • Jfd
    October 19

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    Wow, I fear strict form, because I generally suck at rules haha I am in awe at how skillful you are at it, this flowed seamlessly and did not seem forced at all, great job poet


  • Mango Memories gold member
    October 14
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    Woot! Rhyme?! lol Bravo.


  • Malabu
    October 14

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    an unusual write from you...as thought you have been doing them a long time
    almost tongue twisted me
    in no uncertinty... I know I couldnt do one if i tried
    lol
    great job girl


  • Nienna Calmcacil
    October 14

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    I thought this quite amazing I love what you've gotten out of my quote... Great job. I wouldn't be surprised if you beat me in Laura's contest...

    <333


  • Ken-Maverick
    October 14

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    You should rhyme more,
    love the flow in this one.

    All the best buddy

    Ken


  • Randomly Beautiful
    October 14
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