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Choices- Graffiti Poem #2

    Death                                          Respect 
      Poverty                                  Happiness
        Confusion                    Understanding
                           
                          CHOICES

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  • tearrsofthemoon
    October 16

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    I love the thoughts in this poem, the ideas and emotions it evokes from just simple words. the way it flows together is wonderful. i like that you are expirmenting with new styles and techniques of writing. I applaud you for that, and for doing it so well. Thank yo ufor sharing.


  • polly filla
    October 14

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    I like the idea of this; although you only use opposites with "confusion" & "understanding", and I don't think "poverty" is a choice, unless it's relative

    [edit; further, if you choose to live in poverty, then it's not real poverty, it's frugality (?)]

    Thanks for your entry!


  • Eric Marsh
    October 14

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    i would like to see this on all walls and houses..to make people think....a proverbial kick up the ass...nice one my mate.....keep groovin


  • polly filla
    October 14
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    then you don't need the 'Author Notes'!