I used to think about the darkness, the
absence that must surely follow life, the
no-thought or void or endless cold.
And I would shiver,
no matter the blankets piled on.
Later I learned to think of how the stars tug us, their will opposing gravity.
I learned to think thoughts that turned the world gray,
thoughts that left behind a trail of broken glass and tears.
I lived in lonely make-believe
and my nightmares stopped
as well as my dreams.
Today I think of life, of all that is left and all that is lived.
Today I think of how the stars tug us
but also of how the ground hugs us, nature’s laws a
warm comfort and bitter dose of love.
Today I think of the reasons I am happy,
gather handfuls of sunshine and
watch the ripples in the water, the patterns in the sand.
No more mights and maybes, what if but could? pretend.
They keep me awake at night.
No, today I welcome the darkness and also the light.
I walk in the sun and the shadows and realize
contentment is no sin.
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Ah, the quest for the unknown
I read your poem four times over and not once could I stop part way through. Bravo! I love the last 2 lines:
"I walk in the sun and the shadows and realize
contentment is no sin."
I would love to teach a few people that "contentment is no sin"
If I were to suggest any improvements I would say just reread it a few times, revise, and maybe find ways to better "paint the picture."
For example, lines 7&8:
"I learned to think of a soft sadness, beauty in the curve of a swan’s neck,
the color of blood, a trail of broken glass and tears."
Maybe I'm just not getting it, but its not quite clear on what you mean, I cant really visualize or relate to that part.
But other then that I really like it. Keep up the good work and keep on writing
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Thank you! What do you think of the edits?
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Nicely done! I like it, keep up the good work and keep on writing!
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