iam broken glass and lies told over teas.
iam shaded pale
so no one can see me.
a shadow in the night
acting like a friend
only to retrive information held within.
smiles ,food and champagne
oh what a pretty sight
but, beware of the glimmer
because greed can blindside your life.
A contest entry
- lowercase titles XII by lowercase prelude.
1000 points, ended November 1, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellant Write
WoW! This is a great entry for the contest and worthy of a prize. Good luck and God Bless, Jo-Ann
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thank you sweet woman
hope your well
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This is good, I like what you are expressing, I have to point out you accidentally used "class" instead of glass in the beginning though I assume you meant glass because of the title). I really like the second stanza. GL in the contest!
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thank you i did do that
much appreciated
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Terrific poem! There is a small typo in the last stanza...champain should be champagne.
Best of luck in the contest.
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your right i spelled it wrong
thank you
i fixed it
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loved it
good luck in the contest, hope you win! 
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Shooooo shal we talk of greed and it's destruction. You have nailed this
Shal we talk of foolishness and how it makes us blind,It defintily give's one
a thought of awarness. Your words where masterfull here, Amazing that the heart that has felt it know best to explain it. For the heart of you I know has felt the rath of such pain. Wonderful write.
Good luck in the contest.
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Bravo sweet soul, I like how you used the contest prompt, and expressed it so well into poetry.. Thanks for sharing you, and all the best within the contest, I love it!
-Timothy
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greed is the destroyer R .. BROKEN GLASS always holds drama x
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Nicely done! My favorite line was "because greed can blindside your life."
I felt that you hit the nail on the head with this write.
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i do believe you have defined greed perfectly dear sister...for if not careful it can totally take over your mind and heart, leaving you with nothing...excellent and a winner for sure...niiaish love for sharing with me
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