Silent heartbeats, that filled the hollow bones of infinite tunnels,
wrangled and screwed my masked Romeo into my abstract memory...
Breath-taking -
As his laced body rolled around me in time and tune to the Godly song behind our own world...
Showing mindless infatuation and disastrous chivalry...
Collided passions and lust are thrown to the wind with twirls and dips
And soft, deadly trails of the fingertips...
As I - Juliet - gasps for breath with every close kiss the music allows for attempted love...
Chemical outburts -
Hungry souls push further past the stars and into the infinite space for bliss...
The Angels stop singing and the moment happens as two lips kiss...
Warmth of promises that never bend -
Whispers of pure love that aren't pretend:
"Be mine, Juilet...allow me to make you happy, no matter what that consists...
And I won't stop as long as my soul exists..."
Author notes
Every girl can have her dream, right?
I hope you enjoy my perfect week!!!!!!
(Even if it IS a dream!!!!)
In a list
A contest entry
- Help me fix my head & heart, they've gone & fallen apart by Melissa Burns.
575 points, ended January 14, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
:)
Comments
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What a great poem from a very usual context
it is the art of your poem that you use the simplest way to express
ans when your poems speak it sounds the best
I wish you all the best at the contest
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THANK YOU!
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Well I think you should get bonus points just for the picture lol But this was a lovely little poem, and I enjoyed reading it... I loved this line too! "Showing mindless infatuation and disastrous chivalry..." I can say this is very true for many, many men out there - a deadly combination indeed Anyways, thank you for the wonderful contest entry
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Thank you!!
I'm glad you enjoyed it. I thought that maybe you would end up feeling the romantic longing in the poem, and maybe remember a little something as intense as the feeling I tried to lay out. Thank you so much for the oppurtunity, and thank you for taking your time to read this!!
Tawni
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I love this poem. How you wrote it with passion. I really thie the "Angels stop singing and the moment happens as two lips kiss"
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I really like the flow and the idea of the music behind it. I think every pair of lovers dreams of something like this. Great write,
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That they do!
I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you for taking time to read and comment on my poem!!!!!
Tawni
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well written but dosent quite fit the criteria, it's a rhyming contest...sorry
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Sorry that it didn't rhyme enough, but I tried. It does rhyme, just doesn't have short stanzas, I guess. Thank you for the opportunity!!!
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Great job on this. It is very romantic and easy to see the feels he has for her. Yes every girl can dream for Mr. Right. Very well written and thought out. again Great job.
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I love it! It so romantic! So beautifully written!
Great job!
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fantabulous!
Thank you so much for taking the time to comment on my poem. I'm so glad you liked it.
Tawni
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great!
i really like how you pause then continue
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I hope you put this dream under your pillow
It should keep your heart content for a long, long time. What lovely line you have written, may some kind Romeo complete them for you one day...mac
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Thank you sooooooooooo much! I loved your comment, it made me smile, realizing that I'm not the only one who loves the Romeo and Juliet feeeeel.
Thank you for taking time to read it.
Tawni
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all i can say s that it is good to see you still have that gifted pen, i know for on thing i loved this poem here, and you are right every girl can dream but so can we guys, keep it flowing
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this is extremely sweet ... very good indeed. And touches the heart.. perfect! It was a most pleasureable read
Thanks for sharing.
Aalta
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well penned entry for a perfect week, this should be a contest winner, it flowed with hidden emotions, bravo, John
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Thank you, John. I'm glad you liked it, but sadly it didn't rhyme enough. Thanks, and I'm glad you took time to read it!!
Tawni
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It is very good, it seems as if it is glowing in some form as you read it that i cant describe, excellent work!
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So beautiful and i like the idea of this dream/write i can just imagine it as a book or novel a up to date romance which seems sadly lacking in these days of so much bad news well done on this perfect write and romance wont die as long as people write as you do good work poet.
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Wonderful heart!
I'm glad you feel the same way I do. Romeo and Juliet's love was soooo pure, and yes, it is hard to come by these days. Thank you for reading!!!
Tawni
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A wonderful romantic creation! Romeo and Juliet, set with your words and rhyme. A different take, with a little passion, eloquent!
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oooh I like it! VERY ROMANTIC! Nice!
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beautiful poem. love the imagery.
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Beautiful. Such a thing you have described
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Wow, this is beautiful, I want this week! My week has been slow and rough, exams >< But this is heavenly. Thanks for sharing! good luck!
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I'm glad you enjoyed it!!! Thank you for stopping by and reading! And good luck on the exams!!! -
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Thanks! I really appreciate it
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