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Ghost of Senses

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Silent heartbeats, that filled the hollow bones of infinite tunnels,
wrangled and screwed my masked Romeo into my abstract memory...
Breath-taking -
As his laced body rolled around me in time and tune to the Godly song behind our own world...
Showing mindless infatuation and disastrous chivalry...

Collided passions and lust are thrown to the wind with twirls and dips
And soft, deadly trails of the fingertips...
As I - Juliet - gasps for breath with every close kiss the music allows for attempted love...
Chemical outburts -
Hungry souls push further past the stars and into the infinite space for  bliss...

The Angels stop singing and the moment happens as two lips kiss...

Warmth of promises that never bend -
Whispers of pure love that aren't pretend:
"Be mine, Juilet...allow me to make you happy, no matter what that consists...
And I won't stop as long as my soul exists..."

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Every girl can have her dream, right?

I hope you enjoy my perfect week!!!!!!
(Even if it IS a dream!!!!)

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  • Mad4life
    October 26
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    I love this poem. How you wrote it with passion. I really thie the "Angels stop singing and the moment happens as two lips kiss"


  • MissCDT
    October 20

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    I really like the flow and the idea of the music behind it. I think every pair of lovers dreams of something like this. Great write,


    • Tawni Risley silver member
      October 29
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      That they do!

      I'm glad you enjoyed it, thank you for taking time to read and comment on my poem!!!!!

      Tawni


  • Bluemonday silver member
    October 17
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    well written but dosent quite fit the criteria, it's a rhyming contest...sorry

    • Tawni Risley silver member
      October 19
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      Sorry that it didn't rhyme enough, but I tried. It does rhyme, just doesn't have short stanzas, I guess. Thank you for the opportunity!!!


  • Wati
    October 17

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    Great job on this. It is very romantic and easy to see the feels he has for her. Yes every girl can dream for Mr. Right. Very well written and thought out. again Great job.


  • xxAngelXLiesxx
    October 16
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    I love it! It so romantic! So beautifully written! Great job!


    • Tawni Risley silver member
      October 19
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      fantabulous!

      Thank you so much for taking the time to comment on my poem. I'm so glad you liked it.

      Tawni

  • cgaston16
    October 16
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    great!

    i really like how you pause then continue

  • mcheadle
    October 15

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    I hope you put this dream under your pillow

    It should keep your heart content for a long, long time. What lovely line you have written, may some kind Romeo complete them for you one day...mac

    • Tawni Risley silver member
      October 19
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      Thank you sooooooooooo much! I loved your comment, it made me smile, realizing that I'm not the only one who loves the Romeo and Juliet feeeeel.
      Thank you for taking time to read it.

      Tawni

  • all i can say s that it is good to see you still have that gifted pen, i know for on thing i loved this poem here, and you are right every girl can dream but so can we guys, keep it flowing


  • Aalta silver member
    October 14

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    this is extremely sweet ... very good indeed. And touches the heart.. perfect! It was a most pleasureable read
    Thanks for sharing.

    Aalta

  • SoulWhispher
    October 14

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    well penned entry for a perfect week, this should be a contest winner, it flowed with hidden emotions, bravo, John

    • Tawni Risley silver member
      October 19
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      Thank you, John. I'm glad you liked it, but sadly it didn't rhyme enough. Thanks, and I'm glad you took time to read it!!
      Tawni

  • It is very good, it seems as if it is glowing in some form as you read it that i cant describe, excellent work!


  • Storminbrenda silver member
    October 14

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    So beautiful and i like the idea of this dream/write i can just imagine it as a book or novel a up to date romance which seems sadly lacking in these days of so much bad news well done on this perfect write and romance wont die as long as people write as you do good work poet.

    • Tawni Risley silver member
      October 19
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      Wonderful heart!

      I'm glad you feel the same way I do. Romeo and Juliet's love was soooo pure, and yes, it is hard to come by these days. Thank you for reading!!!

      Tawni


  • malmadre gold member
    October 14

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    A wonderful romantic creation! Romeo and Juliet, set with your words and rhyme. A different take, with a little passion, eloquent!


  • Beverlynohime
    October 13
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    oooh I like it! VERY ROMANTIC! Nice!


  • Vanessa Wolfe
    October 13
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    beautiful poem. love the imagery.

  • Beautiful. Such a thing you have described


  • Oh.My.Juliet
    October 13

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    Wow, this is beautiful, I want this week! My week has been slow and rough, exams >< But this is heavenly. Thanks for sharing! good luck!

    x

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