These words you say,
Have no meaning.
The games he likes to play,
Are beyond childish.
One person is to blame
He speak so monotone
He has no shame
As these world fly out now
“I love you”
When it’s convenient
“I swear I do.”
He says when he wants to hold me
We play this game
We pretend everything is fine
But when the feeling aren’t the same
I hear these words
“I hate you! Go away!”
I start to cry
While he’s clueless on what to say
So we’re both lost
Now he tries to hold me
My heart feels broken
I don’t want him to see
So I hide it
“I’m so sorry dear.”
He whispers as he feels lonely
I try to forget every tear
So I can forgive him
All of these lies
They have no true meaning
They’re made in frantic cries
Or out of pure rage
I finally understand
These words are so hallow
But yet again I take his hand
And give in to these hallow words.
Author notes
I was laying down when someone said they loved me in order to make me feel better and it hurt more than helped. well comment please. thx Dawn
well
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This was an amazing write. Great emotion and flow.
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It's so true that some people say things just to say them purely for the fact that they think it will make everything alright...whether they really feel what they say or not. However, I've been on the receiving end of those type of 'hallow words' and sometimes even though you know they don't mean it you still find yourself going back to them just because of your emotions towards them.
Anywho, great write and keep up the work Fox
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GOOD
good i liked it
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I am so sorry that you've felt this way. I know this was probably hard to write, but thank you for sharing this on AP. I could feel the emotion flowing through this poem. Your have a wonderful talent, and this poem was wonderfully penned. In your second stanza you say, "He speak so monotone" did you means speaks?
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Great job. I'm sorry about how you feel, and hope you feel better. If you need to talk, I'm open. This poem put me in the world that you were in at that time. It really did show me how you feel. Again sorry. *Hugs tightly* Love ya. ^^
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Well written.....u have let ur feelings pop out so fluently that this became a powerful poem enough to hold readers aback.... well done... I am so sorry for what u have felt and try to be happy......
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I like how this poem reflects well with your other poem about friend ship. Seems to me like a very sad thing, as you describe yourself whos a great friend who can enjoy a friend ship " Just laughing and getting to know eachother" and even being able to go through the hard ships if need be, but in this poem when you look for the same in relation from another you dont get it, you only get there pleasantries when "its conveniant" but when the going gets tough, the tough gets going, and they push you away and want nothing to do w/ you. Only when its conveniant. I enjoyed the correlation, and trully see the depths of its deeper meaning. Sorry to hear that that is your situation, if you need to talk you have my number.
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Aw hon. Sometimes these things are more pain than they are help. Maybe you need to think long and hard about where you want to be and how you want to feel. Sometimes we're better off alone. I'm sorry if i sound mean, i hope you're okay. -Hugs-
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wow... you can feel the pain coming off of this poem, so sad, well anyway, great write
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This really is a well captured. I did like the comparing of emotions. It's almost like it was happening right there and right then.
Thank you for sharing this.
I hope that the hollow words find an end.
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wow that's intense x_x
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Wow. This is really good. I can really relate to this. You're really good at capturing raw emotion.
BRAVO!!!! BRAVO!!!!!
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Thank you. lol i try to get all the emotions
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very nice but in the first line it says worlds it should be words shouldn't it
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it does say words......
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ok well either im delusional or you just changed it
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i don't know what you're talking bout......-_-
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