Two tin cans
long string/cord
holes in bottom of cans
lace string/cord through
tie a knot
ta da!
An instant communication device!
Take it in the woods
or one upstairs
the other down
put it to your ear
as the other talks
within the tin can
Can you hear me yet??
Hello Hello
my sister would yell
holding the can tightly
to my ear
I do declare
I HEAR!
A fuzzy feeling within
as the words begin to spin
science takes a whirl in space
with a single word said
through a shoe lace
Hello hello again
so tired from this day of thinking
for ones mind is at work for this
such a wonderful find indeed
imagination once again freed!
A contest entry
- Tin Can Telephone by amysticwriter.
900 points, ended October 31, 8 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - give me your writes from october 09' by HereComesTheSun.
950 points, ended October 31, 67 entries
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Great description of the tin can phone for those who never had one. Hard to believe it works. Good write...
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thanks for entering.
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Wow even though I am part of this generation I really like this...I love hearing my dad talk about his childhood and it seemed so innocent ...Great write...Hazel
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ringaling
Oh, the tin can phone -- such memories. A nostalgic piece. I enjoyed your memory.
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Ah nostalgia! thanks for bringing back memories of my childhood...those were the days! we were so innocent and easily amused, kids these days need computer games and such, I really think they are the ones missing out! you've written a really good, well written poem, i especially love the final lines 'such a wonderful find indeed / imagination once again freed!'
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This is really good! It just makes me smile, too, like someone else aleady said. You used great imagery and this is surely a wonderful poem. Great job!
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this is so cute i love the imaganation and imagery in this poem
"A fuzzy feeling within
as the words begin to spin
science takes a whirl in space
with a single word said
through a shoe lace"
These are my favorite lines
<3Stephanie
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This poem just makes me smile!
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lovely words nicely painted expressions portrayed with innocent chidlike delight that is completely infective or contagious.All the best for the contest and kreep writing delightful verse as this one to water the imagination and intellct with their parched throats with the ambrosia of lovely thoughts.this was a singularly unique write that caoptivated my imagination for sure.Glad to have read it please keep writing and sharing...
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lovely words nicely painted expressions portrayed with innocent chidlike delight that is completely infective or contagious.All the best for the contest and kreep writing delightful verse as this one to water the imagination and intellct with their parched throats with the ambrosia of lovely thoughts.this was a singularly unique write that caoptivated my imagination for sure.Glad to have read it please keep writing and sharing...
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I like this one a lot! It really brings the troubles as an adult back to the innosence of childhood. Thanks for sharing!
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Hahaha. I can remember doing that as a kid and thinking it was like the best thin in the world. funny how children are so easyily amused until we stick them in front of a tv and take away all their thinking power.
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