Autumn comes
Dawn breaks late as frost turns to dew
Colors muted by night become vivid
Mist rises from ponds glazed with ice
Winged birds first flock,then they take flight
Small creatures bury their tasty morsels
While caterpillars become dark and lazy
Meadows of flowers have gone to seed
And field once green have become golden
Leaves shimmering red, gold.amber and crimson
Dance wildly in the breeze
Brilliant sunsets pierce cloudless skies
Colors fade as twilight shadows fall
Autumn comes
Author notes
Pic courtesy of www.deviantart.com by Paul Javor
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i love the graphic and the write is splendid. filled with so many descriptives and brilliant imagery. Thank you for entering the contest.
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Beautiful
.... Filled with imagery and enough to keep the mind working through and through. The picture you chose for this one was stunning and made the piece better. Some people have a gift for wrapping up their presentation with a picture, other do not in fact they distract from it with their choice. You fall into the first catagory, and I am glad I stopped in. BTW we had 20" of snow where I was at, and the snow just stopped within the hour. That's ok they are predicting 60's by the end of the weekend so it will not stay around for long. Thanks for reading my work I am pleased with each comment you make!
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Very nicely done, Sis! Your nature poems are my favorites!
Good Luck in this contest!
Love and hugs,
zzz
♥ Maureen
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ah sissy this is gold, can not pick out fav lines I love the entire write and the picture is stunning
Annie
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Wow
Stunning take on the prompt
Autumn is indeed a beautiful time of the year
and you have painted this wonderful
imagery with elegant words
"Leaves shimmering red, gold.amber and crimson
Dance wildly in the breeze
Brilliant sunsets pierce cloudless skies
Colors fade as twilight shadows fall"
This makes the reader *sigh*
Very well penned
Keep your talented quill dancing
David
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WOW!!!!!!
Stunning imagery you've penned here. I love the autumn with all its earthy, rich colors!
Marvelous job hun. Bravo and best of wishes
♥ kate
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Such a beautiful tribute to my favorite season, Sis Your poem brings the warmth and beauty of Autumn to life with your words.
Good luck in the contest
love and
Dee
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a beautiful rendition to the fall of autumn...solice in the song of supple breezes cought on stems to sigh the dormant trees before winter howl comes
chestnuts beneath my feet
love the write blushie..always a wondrous touch of your pen to read
Mal
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Lovely
Very lovely, well done with your free verse. There seemed to be a haiku feeling to it all which gave it nice flow. I enjoyed the read and felt mellowed by it.
Good luck,
Darmok
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lovely
what beautiful descriptions of autumn and for us so far away who cannot witness these changes it all comes alive with your words
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Excellent
Susan/f
This is beautiful, very descriptive, paints such a lovely picture in my head.
I am just getting back into writing, I need l lots of practice.
Hope to see you soon
Love
Karen
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Ah, observant Susan, truly seeing
from misty frost to lowly caterpillar,
creating drama from Autumn's colors!
Wondrous!!
love and hugs,
M-C
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the intro/beginning reminded me of a rictameter love this..beautiful imagery sis
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Excellent
What a great write. So very well done. you captured the picture so well. Best of luck in the contest
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